All Comments on 'Consequences Pt. 02'

I think your style is great! Nice flow, barely any grammatical errors. It's difficult for me to imagine a guy who looks like Slenderman with Michael Phelps-sized hands and feet being hot, but you have done it.

I do want to see more exposition, though. Lots of alluding to what happened in their past but not showing us as readers. How did they meet, is he a murderer or an underling working for ancient gods that use magic? How does the Ritual chapter tie into this? Is magic commonplace, which is why she's not concerned and he's willing to teach her Latin, the language of spells? Too many questions.