All Comments on 'Consider the Lily Ch. 01'

Awesome start!

More more!!!!!

the story is hot but not as hot as the writer. good work babe.

is there any one out there who hasnt had a bath thing happen to them.?

You need to get an editor,overall it seems to be a good story and the pace needs to be more sedate they went too fast for it to be a great move slow down work through it.

This story is unfinished from 2005. The 4 chapters don't even address the title, and other inconsistencies.

You lost this reader in the third paragraph where two chests were pressed tightly together while a cock was deep in his ass...that picture just doesn't work ! See ya.