All Comments on 'Converging Destinies Ch. 01'

I like the writing, dynamic and exciting. I really hate the characters, they have no self-control or balance. They are all sluts. Come on, use the upper head once in a while. Not every night or every situation needs to end in sex with whoever is in front of you. Calm down, take a breath. I've got to think if I want to continue or not.

Well, after a round of editing myself and a friend doing it....we still missed the Michael thing. I cannot believe we missed it lol. Thank you for pointing it out, i will fix it in all future installments.

Micheal... would be pronounced something like Mish-ee-al. Do you mean Michael?

Just because spell check says it's spelt right doesn't mean it the right word. As soon as I got to this line it kinda spoilt what might have bean ( spell check says it's spelt right but is it the right word) a good story.

"Please....this way Mister Laroux." The nurse said after regaining her composer."

See what I mean ?

with the interaction between the living and those in their dreams. Can't wait for the next chapter.

One other comment though. A few times, a sentence will read as though it was written as a story outline and then changes back to story teller.

Again, looking forward to the next chapter.

Another amazing start to a series. You have a knack for this kind of thing. Can't wait for part 2!