All Comments on 'Cooper Family Pride Pt. 01'

April Fools is coming up, why not humiliate the two Bullies from the beginning by having them get caught in a gay gangbang among the other bullies during a class with the noise attracting the whole student body? What better why to get a laugh on April Fools than to punish the people who are always using jokes, pranks, and other tactics in hazing and bullying?

It’s been 3 months since you said Part 2 was on it’s way. Just looking to see if you’re still writing. Loved this one and can’t wait for the next

So sorry for the delay, everyone! I lost my job recently and I've been trying to get my situation figured out. I know you might think that I should have all the time in the world for writing now, but I'm trying to be responsible. I learned to adult a few years back. I do have part 2 pretty much done. I could just submit it knowing it's imperfect. If that's what everyone wants I'll do that. Thanks, again.

First of all, thanks for your reply while knowing the situation that you lost job recently

I m really sorry to hear that wish you that you can sort it out as early as possible

Also if you really do not have time to edit or modify, you can just submit it coz we really want to know what will be in part 2.

I don't think your quality of writing will be bad and I surely want to vote 5 stars for your sequel

Thanks

Sorry to hear that, and best wishes. With so many authors leaving their readers high and dry you had me worried for a bit. But seeing as how you are one of those unique few who start a multi-parted story and then actually finish it, i.e. The Novelist. I personally don’t mind how long it takes you. I do want to read the next part, but if you aren’t comfortable putting out an incomplete chapter then by all means I have no problem waiting.

Good luck ahead for you and KCCO

P.S. Hands down best line: “Shut up, Jason. You’re literally zero help.”

Hey stranger! I'd be happy to proof read part 2 for you, if you'd like. I'm so glad you submitted this. Now I can't decide which story is my favorite! Please, we all need more!

I love this story, its humorous and sexy at the same time. I laughed my ass off when Jason started singing I like big booties.

I haven't ventured much into the mind control genre but this story was something else. The story is great and honestly I dont think you should release part 2 until you are comfortable with it. I would rather wait and get a good story the way the author intended it than to have a rushed 2nd part. Take care of whatever you need to and get back to it when you have time.

I was in tears from laughing at certain parts because of the dumb shit the son was doing.

Nicequip's stories are as addictive as a drug cocktail of heroin, coke, meth, pcp, pot, ecstasy, and caffeine powder combined would be if I tried them or someone tried using all of them combined, except my addictions are legal.

I would rather an imperfect story than another story that the author abandons. Do it properly if you can, but if that's not going to happen I would rather have something.

Great story let's have part two soon please.

It's been four months, and you left us witch such an interesting and provocative premise. I know that you can give us an even better part II. I believe in you, Nicequip.

Like all the other comments I am really hoping for more. This is a great story.

Please write a part 2.

A super funny and still erotic story. Please more!

Part 2 is submitted! It should be up in a couple days. I apologize for the long delay. It's still not where I would like it to be as far as editing, but it's in decent shape and I don't want to make everyone wait anymore. It's about the same length as part 1, so expect about 15 Literotica pages (that's about 100 Microsoft Word pages). I will likely go back and clean this part up at some point in the future. I still have limited time to write but I have moved on to Part 3. Thanks everyone! I've enjoyed the emails and private and public comments on this one. They were pretty funny.

Wow ..

It's great to hear that you have submitted part 2.

Can't hardly wait to read ..

Thanks

I’m sure this next part will just as good. Lol, is there like a secret pact among Lit. authors when it comes to releasing new stuff? For about two months my feed has been absolutely empty, and now everyone is posting their material at the same time. Seriously, the last two weeks it’s been non-stop new pieces and it’s freakin’ kick ass.

Thanks for the communication and commitment to your fans.

I swear Literotica editors and their servers are slower than molasses or turtles breeding (it's takes turtle so long to finish a 10 mile crawl, how long would it take for them to get turtle pussy?) Please let us know when they finally decide to post it.

I was a little surprised when I didn’t see it go up this morning as well. I believe Laurel still processes all the stories across all categories unless something has changed. So depending on how many submissions in how many categories she’s got a lot of smut to read and then post. She generally gives the first few pages a read to make sure it adheres to guidelines. My guess is she’s overloaded. I already have a small set of changes to make, nothing major. If I submit them now it will set the whole thing back another week. So I’ll wait until it posts and then put in the first edit.

I reached out to to Lit. I can only imagine there was a technical issue with the submission of Part 2. I can resubmit it tomorrow but it will go to the back of the queu, which I must say is frustrating. I don’t think there’s any other option at this point. My sincerest apologies to everyone waiting.

Why doesn't Literotica give editors 3-14 days to review stories as they enter the system, but if they're not reviewed with in that period, the author is given multiple options, post it as it is allowing readers to report issues or fifty 100 readers send critiques to the author, await an editor, resubmit it to the pipeline with a priority tag, or withdraw it and edit it personally using an approved editor program and then submit it for immediate posting? So many publishing houses have certain programs to look for plagiarism, spelling mistakes, writing mistakes, and use regular readers a sneak peek to write reviews and to send in a list of mistakes. Readers are more reliable editors and motivators than editors who have no real loyalty or fallback resources to help them when they have too many things to edit, review, or provide advice about.

So I think it’s just a delay and not an error. No one managed to get back to me today but I think they’re inundated with submissions. As for your suggestion, I think when I first start posting here I never bothered to consider how many people it took to run a website. Truth is I’m not sure how many people make the world go ‘round at Lit but I don’t think it’s many, probably a handful. There is a system for finding editors to review your work before submitting it on a volunteer basis. I just don’t use them. I probably should. Instead of editors I go through a process of convincing myself it’s not worth posting and I should find a better use for time which in turn gets me to reread it and I catch some mistakes and reword a few things and think it’s not so bad after all. I do this about 20 times. I also use beta readers to a certain extent but more structure and pacing than for typos and grammar. When it comes to the speed of submitting it to the site to posting on the site... well... this will only be my fifteenth item submitted... but they’ve been around 3 or 4 days on my previous submissions to post. It’s really not bad. And this is only going to be 7 or 8 days. I’m just impatient. Once a story is posted, you can submit edits to your heart’s content. I’ve edited almost all of mine at some point. Anywho, I’m expecting it to post tomorrow or maybe at midnight EST. I never really know. Fingers crossed.

If Anon. is Volunteering to Edit. Take them up on it. That way you can send Critics to Them. as for the Story I think it is Hilarious. The Cooper Pride is bringing them all down. Imagine "poor" Jason not wanting his girl to touch him. and Maybe his Sister talks her into trying Danny. Poor Jason would be crushed. He still has the other Bullies to deal with.

Well, that was just awesome.

This is hilarious. You did a great job on these extreme characters. Thank you for writing.

Made me hard and loved every page. :-)

Very well thought out, written, and presented thus making it a very enjoyable read.

I enjoyed it! Looking forward to the next installment.

Just Crazy..This Stories is totally blown my mind. The plot super awesome..Good job

crazy but I love it

Holy shit. I didn't think I would enjoy it as much as I did. A masterpiece. It's not like other mind Control stories where it gets boring and repetitive. I can't wait until he fucks his mom.

make it where he maked greg bet the girl (i have a bad memory and couldnt remember her name) if he wins and then he bets everything else (like all his money and then other stuff, then he bets the house, etc.)

You, sir, take the cake. You said this story would be a bit ridiculous and it most certainly was. I was laughing out loud multiple times throughout this story. The absurdity of the dialogue at times belies the intelligent layering of a decent plot. Your writing style doesn't stagnate and keeps the story moving which I appreciate very much. This is a truly developed and constructed story as opposed to literary masturbation. At various times, especially when Lori gets involved, I could sense the plot was going to lead towards resolution - possibly with Danny melting into acceptance and forgiveness, but then you had Lori press on and even start to enjoy the illicit revenge. I loved that. Then... I thought Lori was reverse psyching Danny by liking it a little too much allowing Danny to step back and intellectualize what he was doing which could be a mechanism for Danny to accept and forgive. Then that seemed to fall off the table. I'll tell you... the twists and turns had me thinking you might even be mind controlling me! Mind controlling your readers... that's how good this is lol. Greatly looking forward to your next installment. Such a good story.

This was a real fun story. Way over the top and I can't believe you actually made it work. The length is incredible! I can't wait to read the next chapter! Kudos to you!

been reading stories for about a decade. And i read some pretty amazing and really really good stories. But this one takes the top offf. you sirrrr are a gem. keep up the good work

Totally loving this story.

Perfect revenge. Keep on with the great work.

Please keep writing this one I would love to know how you continue this one

damn good story.

This is one of the most hilarious stories I have ever read. Thank you.

Please continue. One of the best reads I’ve encountered. Thank you.

Best revenge ever! Really got a kick out of it, out of the ordinary for sure. Plenty of sex but that was not the best part the sweet revenge of the Nerds made my day.

Very inventive form of revenge, can’t wait for the next chapter

Absolutely love it!

this is without a doubt the funniest shit i've read in a long time. Keep up the good work.

Either the best thing I've ever read or the worst..... I'm gonna go with the former. Fucking lmao.

I have never laughed so much, or so hard in my life. You, my friend, are a master of parody!

One of best I have read so far. It was too long for my taste but NEVER got boring. Cheers.

Mind Control comedy. I like the way he has them all F_cked up. and thinking its their own Idea. esp. the Mother & Father. But to have Mandy at his call really makes it wonderful. it will be interesting if Beth comes onboard. Not to mention Jason Bully Buddie.

Just how I Like It! This is well thought out and that just makes it a very Fun Read... I guess I like Mind Control without Bimbo Modification and BDSM. I hope you have even more stories in that Warped lovely imagination of yours!

-=MrB=-

Bubble gum for the brain! I love it

It's like I already knew the plot even before the story begun. But HOLLY FUCK MAN, his mom is now in this too. Too much over the top but that's how mind control stories would go. I wouldn't know this is my first time reading mind control so nice going. Definitely worth 5 star.

This chapter is awesome. Cant wait to read the next one

Amazing story

This story was a joy to read. Very detailed and thought out.

I totally Loved It, and I was like Danny in school, and later in Prep School, I was the Shy Kid who was always been bullied maybe not Quite as bad as Danny having my head washed in the boys room toilet, but close, I totally have a "Vivid" memory of so many 'unkind' words and actions from fellow classmen as we went through day school, Pre-Prep School and then later in Prep School. So finally having your tormentors "Paid Back" for all of the countless injustices was Way To Go, they finally got their Paid Back in Spades!

I laughed so hard I cried. Some awesome writing and great story.

The best not to serious story I’ve read in a long time! Thank you!

It's really a mind fucking story, it is overwhelmingly fantastic, I just devoured it. Keep up this type of good work.

Great idea and writing! I really enjoyed reading it

Will you please continue this story

I love how well written the story was, and the boy got his girl, and the rest of the family got their cumdownance also.

This is really a fantastic piece.

One of the very best stories I've ever read here. God I hope there is a whole lot more in your twisted mind! LOL I sure look forward to reading MUCH MORE!

Thank you so much for sharing your talent with we, your readers, It is REALLY appreciated.

amy, an author elsewhere

Yes, the story is over the top. But, it still a great fucking read! Keep it up and either add more to this series or write another like it. Thank you from a grateful reader.

Over the top? Yes. Still absolutely one of the best stories I've read though. Can't believe how quickly these characters have "Sucked me in". ;-)

Man, l laughed so hard I cried!

Brilliant mate! Thank you.

Brilliant, it's hilarious. I love it!

I couldn't stop reading it once I started. It is very different than other mind control stories. There's a different flair to it. Awesome . Keep up the good work

Fun story, a must read.

Good!!!!

I am thoroughly enjoying your story. I have rarely laughed so hard. Thank you.

Great storyline wait for the second part.

I love the plot it just kept getting better and I was in tears laughing so hard at points. I can't wait to read part 2

I never realized that i could laugh this hard and cum as hard as well. Also a very genius writing, the plot was very well planned and writing greatly executed.

Great read!!!!

I can't tell you how many times I laughed out loud. Fucking awesome! Five stars and a favorite point!

just couldn't give it a 5...if 4 1/2 were possible...

I'd say you achieved your aim with it...and score for this and Pt 2 would attest a lot of other people really liked it too-looking forward to Pt 2-really curious how you finish it up.

Danny seemed to grow evil as story progressed...and his mother kindly...though she wasn't above riding Libby's face-loved that bit of dialogue.

And going to check your other stories too-really appreciate stories that are well-edited.

It's just a dildo....

A great story with some good kink. Further in, the pictures painted had me laughing out loud with a hard-on!

Some of the lines had me laughing like hell.

Great Job

This is probably one of the most well written stories on this site. I was crying from laughter at some of the lines. Genius.

This is the first time i feel the need to put a comment on a story instead of just rating them. This is the most fun story I have read on this site, its ridiculous and hilarious.

I love the fact that there is everything in this story from incest to cock cage to domination and mind control.

Best story ever :)

Okay, that was hilarious! Bravo.

This is some seriously twisted shit. And I love every fucking minute of it! I was laughing out loud at the absurdity of some of the things going on, but it's patently brilliant. Looking forward to Part 2.

That was an hilarious first chapter. Keep it up.

Have I ever read anything like this ..no ..it was full of suspense and no clue about what's gone happen ..plot was unique in every sense ...

I read some stories on here that are so good I actually wonder if some accomplished author “slums” on Lit just for fun. Reading your story is one of those times. It’s like Dave Barry meets John Grisham, but nasty. Well done. 5 stars.

Whoa....what the hell!!!

This is some hardcore stuff, wonderfully written, the humor/satire and the plot...all in all a wonderful ride of ...

well just leave it here and i would continue reading

This storyline is outrageous, ridiculous, and shouldn’t work, but the writing is superbly entertaining. The Novelist is probably my favorite. This is completely different and a hilarious distraction. We need to have a beer.

Amazing and humorous. Loved it

If I could, I'd give you 10 stars for creativity.

The humor is fantastic! I have never laughed this hard!

I was literally laughing out loud many times during this story. Absolutely love it!!

God this was great! One of the best mind control/revenge stories I've had the pleasure of reading!

fucking amazing...my new favorite. hope mom gets in on the action soon ; )

I enjoyed this, something Red Skelton could have published if his porn comedy was allowed to be published back in the day. Saw him once at the Sands many years ago, and trust me, his adult routines were VERY adult. So as an homage to one of the greats, understand the madcap nature of this story is, IMHO, excellent. A little over the top in some places, but you have to swing for the fences if you want homers. The author in me want to see Lori redeem Danny, even as she falls into her her own porn delirium. A mother who gives herself completely to save her son... while everybody goes sex crazy. Sounds like fun!

Love the story and off to read the second part.

excellent! hilarious and hot, a great combination! thanks!

I'm speechless 10/10!!!