All Comments on 'Corporate Training Lesson 02'

It would be good to have some idea how the mind control is being done. We are reading this from the hubby's pov, yet there is no information about what he is thinking/feeling. Is the mind control also numbing any emotional response? The couple is coming across like mindless zombies, which damages the erotic aspect for most readers. (Except all you closet necrophiliacs out there) Anger? Horror? Guilt-riddled enjoyment?

After the second chapter, I am sick to my stomach and feeling creeped out. Not erotic. I won't ve reading another one,

great story, but it's incomplete.

of what is happening are wonderful. Your writing has such clarity about what is happening to him, and what he sees and hears happening to his wife. I like this, because I have a tendency to imagine descriptions in reverse.

You do similar things when you describe his internal reactions, but it's almost like his emotions are as shut off as is his ability to disobey. Is he terrified or just alarmed? Furious of just kinda angry? How does he resolve (or struggle with) the fact that he came from getting buttfucked? Is he wanting to rip John's head off, or does he find his mouth watering to suck him again (and how does he react to that).

I feel a bit of a heel offering this critique, because you write while I only read, and because you took the plunge to not only write the story but to post it. For that, I thank you.

I really do like the story, and am enjoying your writing. I hope that you will keep writing. I'm interested to see where the story goes, and I would like to keep watching you become an even better writer than you already are.