All Comments on 'Cougar Trap Ch. 01'

hard to read obviously not native English Speaker

Was this written by some 10 year old boy from India, if so please do not write till you get older.

Is English your 'native' language?

Some phrasing seems peculiar.

I suggest that if you are considering continuing to write then a) learn to PROOF READ and b) get an Editor!

The first three sentences *all* had at least one spelling, grammatical, or basic literacy issue. Stopped there.

The first three sentences *all* had at least one spelling, grammatical, or basic literacy issue. Stopped there.

@2Dawgz2Katz Yeah I'm from southeast asia and it's my first experience writing story lol.

You do just fine. Don't pay attention to the negative people. You learn as you and skill comes with writing!

Lost me when you seemed to open with the female wearing a slip... Realism not included.

Very nice, yes there are various mistakes I spotted. I have someone read and edit mine. Overtime you will gain so much confidence, please don’t give up.