by secretshy16
Please write more interratial romance story. Really like this...
This was definitely one of the better and more well developed stories I've read on this site. I've never written a comment on here before, but felt compelled. Excellent job!
I love the build up between Aiden and Skylar. You really took your time with them and that made the story even better. Great ending!!!!
I enjoyed the build-up you created between Aiden and Skylar. Write more like this.
DONT STOP KEEP THIS STORY GOING THIS STORY IS TOOOO GOOD TO BE WASTED!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE DONT STOP! I LOOOOOVE EEEET!!
When I read the line that said "I looked to see why I was starring!" I gave up!
Desperately needs an edit. Or maybe a rewrite. Verb tense was all mixed up, dialogue was stiff(almost comically so), and they only seem to deserve each other because no one else should have to put up with them.
Not well written I am afraid.
All over the place and came off a bit childishly written.
Also, wasn't it supposed to be a sex story, not much sex in it.
The whole thing was kind of disappointing and dare I say mind numbingly tedious.
Maybe you should rewrite it. I have read other stories of yours, so I know you can do better. This effort was not one of them.
This was a good story,and I'm glad that it ended the way it did,,,And I know that the story could hve gone a dozen different ways,but it ended up in a good way,,,
Hmmmmm Aidan was a tedious prick and should have just been left jacking himself off.
He is a total dickhead and she is a teasing bitch. He is possessively obcessive about her and she likes stringing several guys along, at the same time. No way that this mess works out. 3 stars for trying...