by Tosshhh_
your username as a little joke. So yes you are called Tosshhh and you write Tosh. This has no real story, it's just a rehash of well established sterotypes, so boring as a result.
I hope you are proud of what you write. I hope your mother and dad see it too. I also hope they take away your basement privileges and force you out into the real world where you would be on the cucky side of the argument. I find you and your story disgusting and not enjoyable and I will never recommend anyone reading your writings. I really don't want to say they are stories because that gives stories a bad name.
The last part showed a real lack of any sort of imagination, it being just a rehash of tired old tropes. For any couple to have has two kids, one an adult (in most countries) and suddenly transform into comic book caricatures of real people is beyond absurd. The best erotic stories retain at least a small semblance of a link to reality.
Hey, Annonymous
I actually agree I want to go back and rewrite this story