All Comments on '"Daddy" Joins The Family'

Excellent first story

Thanks so much!

I enjoyed it, keep writing and never take the comments to seriously. It seems people like to come to the site to read and criticise more than enjoy what they are here for

Well-written! Love the description and the action. Thanks for your effort!

Nice story! They've sure gone from 0 to 100% pretty quickly though. I'd slow down a little!

My first erotic story, I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did working on it :-)

Very nice storie.

Pleas write some more stories.

Thanks for the comments. I appreciate you not only taking time to read what I wrote but taking extra time to share you thoughts. I won't let any critical notes get to me to much, thanks And yes I could have eased into it a bit more. I think I was just too impatient for the good stuff to start and sacrificed some believability. I am working on a follow up so will work to incorporate these comments into that. Thanks again all. I don't know if there's a way to reply to individual comments (I can't seem to find one) so I'm just making a new one here.

It's only your first and already sooo hot! Great star indeed

5* and follow

Awesome!

YEG

Wonderfully erotic

Loved it, can’t wait to read more. :)

Wow that was hot wish that could happen to me

Basically a good story the exception that I'm definitely not into the dom/sub thing. As with most writers, I'm aware that story length is always a consideration. However, when the plot went from just having coffee with Jon to a full blown dom/sub relational was way too abrupt . . . .