All Comments on 'Dance Me to the End of Love Ch. 10'

It is really creepy how close this story is to pedophilia! The alluring woman is old, and you wrote that the girl had just barely turned 18, but you still continue to call her a "teen", and not an adult, and similarly, call her a girl, and not a woman. Assertion: The woman is in her 50s and the girl is barely 18, yet you blood-curdlingly call her a teen still. And the woman is just getting the girl to please her first. I noticed how you, as a writer, were setting a certain mood that almost made this seem like it wasn't just an older woman leading a young girl on, but rather that the girl herself was also kind of interested already, but still the older woman is—to a large extent—forceful, especially because although the girl is an adult, she is only now beginning to really take on full understanding of being her own person. And again, it is made plainly manifest that the story is pedophilic by the fact that the story is between a "WOMAN" and a "GIRL". This is a bastardly debased and polluted story to write, especially because it is only coming from YOUR mind, and not just a report of an event happening in real life; you are trying to create a fantasy that justifies pedophiles just enough that most people might not recognize it (because, as you say, she's barely 18), and it is a foul, dishonorable thing.

From the author:

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. This chapter is one of several pieces of the meta story arc that have been—and remain—most challenging to stitch together (mainly origin/backstories). You noted, for example, that the narrative hints at both women’s motivations. This is correct and intentional, however, I had NOT intended to suggest pedophilia. That that was a takeaway is a matter of bad copy editing on my part.

For the sake of context, this story is purely fiction/fantasy, as you also surmised. However, a many of the scenes and pieces of dialogue, across the entire story cycle, are based on actual occurrences. These are a combination of my own experiences, and those of other people I have known and loved.

All that said, the issues that you raised are valid, and I will request that this chapter be taken down in order to address them.

From the author:

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. This chapter is one of several pieces of the meta story arc that have been—and remain—most challenging to stitch together (mainly origin/backstories). You noted, for example, that the narrative hints at both women’s motivations. This is correct and intentional, however, I had NOT intended to suggest pedophilia. That that was a takeaway is a matter of bad copy editing on my part.

For the sake of context, this story is a work of fiction/fantasy, as you also surmised. However, a number of scenes and pieces of dialogue, across the entire story cycle, are based on actual occurrences. These are a combination of my own experiences, and those of other people I have known and loved.

All that said, the issues that you raised are valid, and I will request that this chapter be taken down in order to address them.