All Comments on 'Danger Ch. 10'

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tnadnudertnadnuderover 10 years ago
You Got Confused Writing Your Own Story!!

She turned to Terri, "This is Danger. He's going to prove to me that I'm beautiful even though I'm not."

That's where you mixed them up!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
too short

While this chapter is well-written, it is too short in all aspects, from character development, to plot, to back ground. Everything seems rather too rushed, including the all-too-brief love scene.

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