All Comments on 'Darcy's Doubts - Day 01'

Imma slap Darcy if he doesn’t get with it lol

Your first story and you hit it out of the ball park.

Please tell us that there are more chapters and more background on these two.

What a lovely start! Looking forward to more.

2 stars

I'm ready for day #2!

Very good humor! The light awkwardness for someone going through a brand new experience made it feel very genuine. The fallout was rough, but in a good way. My only concern there was I would have thought Kyle would have been a bit more hurt by the incident, being so close to Darcy. But that just makes me put myself into Darcy's shoes even more. Has this happened before, etc. Eh. Just my two cents.

Also early on, trying to place the characters, there is a "Finding us a place to stay". I re-read a bit to see if it was a pronoun choice or a Midwestern colloquialism.

Honestly a good read, and I look forward to day 02!!