by EstebanMamono
Confusing, disjointed, hard to read. Flipped back and forth timewise with little continuity. Even sexual scenarios are hard to comprehend and not really arousing. Perhaps this world is better explained elsewhere but I'm not going to look for it when I can just go back to enjoy HFHM.
thanks I try what I can but due to real life I often take big pauses, I write intermittently, I'm sure quality drops because of that.
Gotta love the nameless mook who flames this story without reason. This story was cute. Never was that big a fan of dark elves, but it's a cute story.
Very well. Can you email me about flaws? Please? I somehow am blind to them.
Please reply.
This story is leagues beneath your usual quality. It reeks of poorly written sex scenes, terrible worldbuilding, and overall bad storytelling. I couldn't read anymore after Page 5. I simply skipped to the end to see if anyone else decided to drop this comment. If you want to talk about this more, simply message Cheral on the TFT discord. But overall, I would not be surprised at all if this became your most disliked story.
Shout out goes to Breakaway Republic from Touch Fluffy Tails for the ideas, and please visit him and his stories as well!
Also jesus why did my vote tank so badly?