All Comments on 'Dating My Sister'

Need another chapter

Absolutely perfect and so very hot, I really enjoy your writing. One thing I think you overlooked was prom photos, I would think that would be insisted upon by his parents.

I didn't think that this story was going anywhere to be the romance-y kind, when i saw sex scenes in the first page itself. But i was wrong and i happy that i was, great job with the sex scenes and the wholesomeness +5

You can not end there! This is reader abuse!

Why do you write such good stories, yet don't write a follow up?? This one needs a part 2...

Now that was attendance and dam erotic. I hope there a chapter two soon😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍

I am never disappointed with one of your works. I do think there's room here for, "the next day" effort. I would love to read about what you alluded to!

AWESOME!!! Another great story, MDM!

Reader abuse, indeed! Please, another chapter!

Just plain good!

Hot hot hot story, wow loved it and hope there is so much more. Her unprotected pussy might be making a baby right now. I wonder if Mel will get knocked up too? Please keep going with this story.

I hope that you have a couple more chapters, you can’t end it here. Well, I know you can. But, please, don’t. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Hopefully, a few more chapters to come....

awesome!!!!! more. pleeze???

Part 2 please!

5/5 Like the other readers have already said. I'd love to read more about these two. The ONLY ummm... thing... Is that it starts out as first person from Dawson, then it turns third person right after the first date. Didn't take anything away from the story, but something the reader will notice if they're paying attention.

Great story, so well paced, but when it came to fucking time, it became an inferno. Well done.

Part 2 is coming very soon, right? Please tell me I'm right?!?!

Soooo well written. You've hit all the key points to a great incest story. Character development that had a slow build on their relationship, slow increasing sexual tension between them, and then the consummation of it all with loving sex and admission of love. I'm hopeful you do at least a Part 2, maybe even Part 3. (I know we don't see much of you on the site, but I'm hopeful...)

And it really deserves a sequel

Overall good story, though initially confusing when it went from first person to third person.

Great, don't end it there. MORE

Awesome more please love to see how it plays out with borther sister and mel

Let’s hope there is more to follow. I’d love to learn about the sex between Ray and Mel, introducing him into the relationship, Ray’s certain pregnancy, and Mel’s sure to follow pregnancy.

Loved the whole thing. Hope you have a follow on story as well.

Great read! linnear has a great point though, and it's easily fixed. When they check out and go back to Mel's, she gets 'dolled up' and they take the prom photos then.

I really enjoyed your story. How it flows. I hope you have plans to write a next chapter. I think on their relationship with their parents (will they find out or not?) and how Mel will be involved.

Another great story! This one needs to continue on with the inclusion of Mel. Thank you!

Wow. What a great plot. Just amazing. Can’t wait for the sequel. It’s so loving

it was so good I have to ask for more.

"Ray reached up and wrapped his arms around her back, and then slid his hands down her smooth skin to fill his hands with the firm globes of her ass".

more than once you called Dawson 'Ray', mixing them up. a bit of proofreading would/should have caught this. otherwise a somewhat good story although a bit too rushed for my taste. story had much more promise if taken a bit slower.

With 5's, but if you write another as good as this, AND, you have all three fucking one another, I'll give you a 6.

Damn! And I thought “Revenge” was hot! You da man, MountainDewMan, you da man of the sizzling hot short story. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece with us.

Cheers

SAGE

Right there was where you switched from first to third person.

Fantastic ! Great story line, had me from the start. Wife loved it, she wants more and so do I.

Excellent story, I am really hoping you add more and include Mel.

Great story you need to continue this story with the plan of seduction of Mel and with Rays help and awesome threesome

5 Stars - So steamy, I was jerking off as I was reading. I've never cum so hard. Need another chapter. Hurry

Really loved everything about this story. I hope you decide to continue this! This story needs more chapters.

Bring on the trio.... Its gotta happen!!!

MORE! MORE!

That was crazy sexy. Great stuff hope there is more

Damn! I love your work. As stated before,,,, more chapters please.

Great story

Great idea having Mel move in.

Both get what they want.

I hope you follow this up with the threesome!!!!

And when to use commas and periods. Your writing is good. Your use of punctuation however, needs work.

Please continue

Great story and the ending was exactly as I hoped for.

Part 2 of xxxxx

Pregnant both Mel and Ray over time. Dawson marries Mel

And then Ray stays to help out with the two kids.

A boy and a girl 🤔. Thanks for writing.

I would tell dear old Dad to shove it up his ASS if I didn't want to go to a stupid prom.

Generally like all your stories, but you outdid yourself

Flows like a cold Mountain Dew on a hour summer afternoon!

Good story. A Part 2 would be good. Thanks.

This is one of my absolute favorite fantasies- dating your sister, especially for Prom! I gotta say, your slow & skillful buildup of this 'brother-sister dating' scenario had me hard by halfway down page 1: first date- sis looks cute; second date- she looks sexy & encourages him to finger her, then gives him a hot BJ, & on Prom night she's obviously hot, horny, dressed for sex & eager to cross the line! I'm glad that you went into some detail on her clothing choices (which were excellent, BTW), to let us see her transition from sister to lover. This story is VERY well-written, & is going to serve my m-bating fantasies wonderfully!

Can't wait for the next part!!!

Please turn this into multi character story

This was well thought out. Looking forward to future growth of this story.

This was damn good need Chapter 2,3,4

Now that is a great story! And sexy as hell. You write really well. I was right there with them. Your descriptions while they are having sex are so good! I wish I could say this as good as you could. It's just that some writers are too clinical or too cold in the description of feeling or the act of sex. You on the other hand are much more descriptive, personal and sensuous with your writing style. I hope to goodness you never stop posting and let us know if you do somewhere else. I read everything of yours.

One of the beat I've ever read , eager for the following parts.

Please more chapters

this one needs a part 2

Made my dick twitch

outstanding!!

My favorite part was when they were watching a movie. It reminded me of the summer when I took my girlfriend to watch movies in a theater. We saw a few movies per week and the time we spent together was magical. Please continue with this story.

Damn, now you know that you can't stop here. This story definitely needs another chapter about the three of them. What a great build up and detailed hot story. Excellent job. Now get to work on chapter 2!

Loved the chemistry build up, You're very good at keeping your descriptives simple yet satisfying to read. Would love to read a continuing story!

This is fucked up they're siblings. That's incest

Dude, you just KNOW how to write hot, sensual sibling love stories. Keep it up!

One of the best I’ve read. Great build-up. It was a little jarring when you switched from first person to third person but all was forgiven as the overall story was very well done. There were a couple of contrivances that could’ve been handled in a more realistic or logical manner (“having to go on dates ahead of the prom because Dad won’t buy it otherwise” is a weak reason for the dinner and movies when Dad never actually SAW him go... he could’ve just TOLD Dad he’s going on dates... So, maybe just use Ray initially being bored and busting his balls or making him jump through hoops as the reasons he has to treat her to dinner and a movie?). Also surprised that none of his friends at the dance recognize his sister? But those are minor nitpicks. Enjoyed the story a lot.

Great story needs a sequel

Hallo lieber Autor ich würde mich freuen wenn sie diese Geschichte weiterschreiben würden da die Geschichte Potential für mehr Kapitel hat zumal das Ende förmlich nach einen Fortsetzung schreit.

Love it. Please keep it going. There is so much more you can add to this story .

Do they move in like she said? Does she get pregnant? Does Mel?

Not only does change perspective in the middle, literally in the middle of a paragraph, but it seems you can't keep track of characters, as evidenced by the comment on the sisters note that he won't need the condoms, "She's my sister, you ass". Either it's aimed at himself, in case it would be "your sister", it's aimed at the sister, and it would be "You're my sister", or it's mistakenly aimed at dad...who doesn't know.

This one has potential to be as good as most of your writing, but it urgently needs editing to make it easier to read and understand.

Thuis needs more charters.

you did it again! great story. i would love to read more about them living together, please continue.

Great writing. Love this story!

I'm usually not a fan of incest stories, but I really enjoyed this one. To me, it seemed quite plausible and was written in a way that made their coupling quite sensuous and real. Maybe a sequel for this one?

ER ...

Awesome...hope there is more to come!?

So simple and so complex. Another great story.

I wanna write like you some day.

That was super hot. I agree with the others, I hope there is more to come and see how Mel gets in the act.

I will just copy and paste what everyone else has said, more please

dam hot story and would love to see a follow up and will check to see if there is one.

Great story, Thank You!

I’ve read a lot of stories on Literotica. Until now, I’d never read one this perfect. Tender, poignant, sexy, without being crass, romantic, and oh, SO erotic, you had me cheering for Dawson and Raylene along every step of their journey, one that avoided the all too common “zero-to-sex” with its slow, but steady, smoldering buildup that had me panting for more. I want Dawson and Raylene to succeed as a couple, and I hope there are more chapters forthcoming of their future together. The author should consider writing romance novels.

This is one of the best, if not the best, story I’ve read on Literotica. I’ve read and reread this story several times. Would love more along this story line, and I think it would make a great audio. Thanks.

The flow was well done, and the premise simple - illicit, forbidden love.

However, I am curious why there was a sudden, random change from first person to third person. It broke up the flow of the story. Additionally, the sex itself, while definitely hot, but read more like a scripted porn scene than a legitimate encounter. It almost seemed forced at the end.

One final note - if the sister was only a couple years older than him, someone would have almost certainly recognized her.

That Dad... Man, that fucker had serious issues!! I think in highschool, at some point, he had a one-off secret butt bump buddy, and immediately regretted it with no small amount of horror, lol. Dude is fixated with vicariously living through his son! ... And hell, where is mom? She must be a serious doormat with that loser for a husband: (

Giving him a box of condoms at the dinner table, holy fuck!

I'm surprised that sister didn't move in with her friend as soon as possible, just to get out.

WONDERFUL, absolutely wonderful!!!!! There is virtually nothing i didn't love about this story and ive only rated 5 or fewer stories on this whole site a 5 and this story is one of them.

Wow, what a hot story. This one definitely would make a great series. Well done 5 ++ stars

Sometimes a controlled amount of violence does solve or prevent problems, I just loved the way Ray handled Rickey! Other than that, nicely progressing emotions and hotness, very likeable characters, 5 stars!

Don't forget my fellow readers, we're on a free ride here, so demanding perfection is perhaps somewhat ungrateful.

Pretty good

A well done story for only 3 pages

The characters are likable

The premise is simple but it works

The sex scenes are hot

What I wish you did was maybe spend more time with building their sibling relationship

Even though both the main characters don't date and are only close with each other it feels like they jump into the sexual stuff a lil too quick

Dawson does have conflicts in his head but they don't show through any actions so the conflicts don't feel like they mean anything

If this story was more slow with the build up and a couple pages longer it could've been perfect

I still enjoyed it

The sex scenes are done well

B-

Very good story, but with the mention of Mel joining into the threesome, it would seem that this would be at least a two or more part story. Great read.

Surely need part 2 with two pregnant woman by Dawson when they're moving together.

Part 2 please

Sweet Jesus!, that was hot!

Very, Very hot and well written.

please part 2

I absolutely loved this story in spite of the many flaws in it. I gave it 5 stars 🌟 anyway.

The biggest problem that I had was taking his sister to the prom as his date. Let's approach this from a practical perspective. There's absolutely no way in hell that Raylene can anonymously show up as Dawson's date. A healthy number of the other students are going to recognize her since she was on the basketball and track teams. If for no other reason, at the bare minimum his friends are going to know her name and that she is his sister. I absolutely loved the scene when Ricky gets his comeuppance. But it doesn't really work. It only works when you assume that Ricky doesn't know enough about Dawson's home life to have a clue. If we were to rewrite the story and have Raylene renamed to Debbie or something else, and have it stated that Ricky had never seen the sister who attends the prom under the assumed name of Raylene, you can make it work.

As for the father, I can relate to Dawson's embarrassment. My own father wasn't quite as crass and uncouth, but almost. He did embarrass me because of his behavior. My taste in women ran in the direction of the cute girl next door type. My father kept trying to make me date the fashion model vapid type. It caused me great pain during my adolescent years when he tried to set me up with his own choices.

This tale is a diamond in the rough. I've returned to read it more than 4 or 5 times. I've personally fallen in love with Raylene. Bisexual women are fantastic! Having been married to a Bisexual Woman for 25 years, I can testify from experience that they are the absolute bomb! Raylene is written with great skill and is easily the best character in this story. She's the whole reason why I keep coming back to read this over and over. The scene where Melanie asked if she swallowed and then she kisses her for an answer was the absolute best 💓!

Wow! Fantastic series. How about more chapters? Wish I could rate it higher than a 5.