All Comments on 'De-Stressing the Business Trip'

First time I ever gave a "5" for a story that didn't involve intercourse.

Well written, nicely laid out, a hint of plausibility. Bravo!

I like the story. I like the rich vocabulary. It has an almost Edwardian feel to it.

However, there are a number of points where the flow of the text is interrupted.

e.g. "When we got to inconsequential I airport parking lot Dean left us to pick his car up in another section and we were left to walk together towards our cars which were parked very near to one another."

Also, you really need to break up the text into more paragraphs.

If you would please re-edit it and re-submit, I will do a positive review in the Author's Hangout.

Angela

Had me stroking~!

Nice

The story plays out that it could actually happen.