All Comments on 'Deal with the Red Guy'

Ready for more adventures and trouble that he will get into with his new ability:-)

You meant that he was eighteen, not sixteen, didn't you?

Good start, though you shouldn't be mixing first and third person narration. Probably better if it was all in third person.

More, More, and More :)

Very nicely done, and a bit longer story too. When is the next chapter? :)

You wrote is so that he has no female relatives (mother, sister). What's the point of a mind-control story where the main character is a teenage guy if he can't use his powers on women in his family?

Very well written. Wish I had the "word" when I was his age. This story took me back.

great story love all your stories just hope there's going to be more.

Loved it though the sex could hace been dragged out a bit more. And please ignore. Hornacek's comment

Not too bad. I would like to know more about the main character's journey and maybe know what Nina had in store for him. Good Job!