All Comments on 'Dealing with Sister'

not good in any way keep the trash in the nonerotic area not here. swapping drugs for sex does not belong here.

this story was good its like most of them so don't cut it up....

I loved it!

this should have gone in rape/noncon - well enough written, but far too misogynistic to be erotic - also rather poorly edited. for instance - the drive home:

"It didn't make him any [less] angry, but there was something liberating about stepping on the gas pedal and ignore[ing] all the rules"

There was more but those kind of leaped out at me.

Yummmm! Forcing your sister to dance on the end of your cock! And she loved it! In Chapter 2 I hope Mark fucks Sarah in her wrinkly little asshole!

Thank you all for commentating on my story. Love reading what you have to say. If you see any errors in the story please let me know and I will fix them.

Bert_Fegg: Thanks for the feedback. I fixed the error you pointed out and have added a warning about the non-consent in the new version I submitted today.

I also edited some other parts and fixed a continuity error. Brown eyes turned into blue somehow. Not in the new version. I will try to make a bigger update later, but just some quick fixes for now.

Very good

I loved it too. Wish my brother had have fancied (caught) me when I secretly crossdressed at home !!!!!

That was hot.

The fact that you had someone edit this, and there's still about 200 mistakes, or...

The fact that you plagiarized "Lose Yourself" By Eminem. "His palms felt sweaty, his knees weak and his arms heavy"... the rest is.... there's vomit on his sweater already, mom's spaghetti. He's nervous, but on the surface he looks calm, and ready.

I'm amazed no one else picked up on that. That had me rolling. Anyways... the story itself is... Eh... (Waves hand back and forth)

The subject was good and the end was well done (could have been better.) But I got really frustrated and impatient with all the "filler" in the middle of the story. It reminded me of listening to someone talking to a captive audience who, reveling in the sound of his own words, says the same thing over and over!

Don't worry to much about critic's that don't even have the nuts to put a handle on their comment.Just because a story is similar to one someone read doesn't mean they copied .DUH just means not one damn thing all stories are variations on a limited number of themes.

Just wanted to let you know who commented on anonymous critic.For some reason could not log in.

On page 2 it says eric not Mark. It was a good story though

I love it!

When you will write second chapter?

Now it's all Mark in there, thanks for pointing it out. It made me edit some other things as well. Thanks for the feedback. Also, I don't think there will be a chapter 2.

That is as soon as it get updated, which shouldn't be too long.

Read your stuff backwards

that will give you a big leg up on things