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All Comments on 'Dede does Joseph'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Too predictable

It's too easy...great character development but it's too cliche....too "Hollywood." You do a good job of building the climax ( pun intended) but it's just...I don't know....this is obviously not your first attempt but there needs some tweaking....

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