All Comments on 'Deja Vu'

You skipped why she did it, and more importantly, what did hubby do? When you send in part 2, try not to jump around so much as it makes following the plot harder than necessary.

AND THEN?

Just a boring story of another divorce lawyers payment on his Lamborghini 1*.

Just sad.

Thanks for the read.

Seriously, if this is the best you can do, stop. Just... don't. This is shit.

What the fuck was misconstrued? Yet another wimpy cuck writer 1*

Your story was all over the place. You need to take more time and develop your plot, your characters, and have cohesive transitions between different story-lines in the story. Keep at it.

Yeah, Right

Meh.

stupid wimp story! 1*

too short, last paragraph ruined this one

Not another cuckold husband story !

Can we please have some stories were the husband is not a wimp !

The real objective of this story was to vilify religion...All through the story, almost in every sentence was referred how his wife was religious, but after 5 seconds became a whore. It was strange, until the last sentence where he showed clearly why this story was written even if it presented him as a retarded...So the title is right! It's really a "Deja Vu" of a bad writer with even a worst story showing in LW...1*

1 star only because I can't give it a negative score.

First self respecting husband discovering their wives lying and cheating would just hide behind a fence and "jerk off" I think a base ball bat or a long pause to plan a dark quiet and painful visit to this Romeo and making sure no cameras, witnesses and for sure his cell phone is destroyed along with his body. I hope you change the story, however, its your story write and say it however you wish. As for popularity I rate it a 2. lets see how the next chapters go.

Just not developed. There are a number of paths you could use to tell us all a story... Some may not care for which path you follow. But follow one. 2

this was written by a child or someone who is mentally retarded.

If I could give it a minus 5 I would have.

Killed his or her editor. Wow.

One of the worst ever!!

-5* for poor cuck shit!!!

Yeah your writing needs work and I agree with the rather cruel posts above, BUT.

BUT you did do something right that 90% of slut wife stories do wrong:

You mentioned that you were getting pussy while she was fucking around- so you did not care as much. That is much hotter and less gay/cuck/weirdo. It puts you closer to being a swinger on the sex map, and that deserves points.

A cuck alone is stupid and weak. A cuck who has his own pussy on the side, could be simply awesome.

You need to work with an editor (they're available here on the site), but you're off to a good start.

Needs an editor, needs a thought out story line, needs a conclusion, needs an author, needs so much...

what it doesn't need is your dumb ass comments.

??

Did you get tired of writing and just wanted to end it?

This seemed to wnd abruptly with no discussion of ramifications of her cheating

What we really don't need is your stupid, dumb comment. Fuck off Bonnie, nobody is interested in your shit comment. Go do what you do best, fuck your neighbors. Give this a one star rating in honor of that cunt whore who doesn't even read the stories, just gives them automatic five star ratings. What a sorry ass cunt.

Not a bad start, shows promise, the help of a volunteer editor would be useful.

This is comically bad.

Wow.......too much stupid to comprehend.

stupid cuck shit.

Then you can tell us that is stupid and we'll agree with you.

Weren't you?

Das ist ein haufen Dreck.

What did I just read. A religious whore and cuck story.

JFC you're living proof God does indeed make worthless creatures.

Crap

I hope this author is a 'one and done' kind of author. I certainly don't want to see any more trash like this on these pages ever again.