All Comments on 'Delivery Man Delivers Ch. 02'

Not going to do well in LW, as most readers like a real , or something resembling, story. Perhaps back in Toys would be a better fit.

Wrap yourself up in a FedEx box and ship yourself naked to Tiajuana, Mexico without any return address.

Especially rolling into the Loving Wives category. Readers are going to bomb that move. The story needs to be much stronger to survive here. This was weak sauce.

1 star

not very good writing

Ma’am I have a delivery for you.

If you could confirm the address and give me a good delivery time I’d be more than happy to bring it to you.!

I enjoyed your story! It’s a shame the driver didn’t fall over down the hall. I look forward to your next one. Let the negative comments Improve your writing but don’t let them get you down.

Is because our resident troll, 26thNC will down vote you and make nasty comments from all of his accounts. He's the main reason people have moved from this category. For a man who claims to hate these stories, he's always the first to read and comment on them. My guess is after he spills a watery little puddle on his chair.m