All Comments on 'Descent into Darkness Ch. 01'

well you need to try again

Utter garbage.

"Feminine viles" - Hahaha! If you are going to use big words - like 5 letters - at least spell them correctly! Try 'wiles'.

Also it belongs in BDSM NOT loving wives. DO NOT EVER WRITE AGAIN.

This is very stupid story,you write very unrealistic

Plot is pretty wild. It is not bad but would develop the characters a little deeper. All in all it has potential and so do you.

They're all bitches. Keep writing and don't let those pussy ass cunts tell you otherwise.

Erotic? If this garbage gives someone a sexual thrill than they have some serious problems. This is fetish or bondgae or torture but not sex or loving anything. Yuck.

it has possibilities. keep going, would like to hear more

writing, not really a story, sorry

was written by a nigger. That's right I SAID NIGGER. not a black man. A NIGGER with a little twisted penis with duck butter under the tight foreskin. No self respecting black man would have anything to do with whores and pimps. Maybe SAMUELPEICEOFSHITX wrote it and published itunder another name to keep him feeling like he's not a total loss because people have been writing comments for his stories and calling him and them shit

You are on the right track.....keep trying and give more detail.....I'm sure the story is much better than all your detractors could have written.....chin up....bring on more chapters...oh...and by the way.....thanks.

...this story is really just a metaphor for our governments recent bailout program! Yeah, we got jobs for ya! You suck dick,we give the robbers bonuses. Or maybe it's just a little fags idea of sexy humiliation. Oh well, I'm sure the kids will be happy mom and dad are off the dole! Pistolpackinpete

writing another story about black supremacy. You are correct previous commenter. It sounds like our governments bailout program. BUT...have you determined just what is the cause. I think it's a non white racial effort to get back at the white population, True we let evil greedy white men control things from the git go. The slave situation was the greed of the Portugese when they took slaves that the more powerful tribes in Africa took over the weaker tribes and sold them to greedy southern plantation owners(the southern plantation owners were from the north)Then there was the oil problem in which the white man set up a bunch of greedy evil Arabs as Shieks and such and made them keep their countries down while the white man robbed the country blind. I could go on and on listing examples but that would pre occupy me from my main message. Do not let the colored man do this to the white race. It's only your greed for pretty baubles that keeps it up. Don't hate the colored man or feel like you are superior to him because you're not. I think the present situation shows that.But that doesn't mean that we can't defend ourselves from him.

Why not put this into Interracial, BDSM, or Nonconsent, where it belongs? If this is someone's fantasy, all I can say is it's pretty sad. And I think it is insulting to both Blacks and Whites, not to mention the stereotyping.

Please stop writing about your worst fantasies

French,isn't it?

I am looking forward to reading more of this series.

Secreatly I have had fantasies like this. Great writing

Don't quit

a pretty good start for this genre.

I guess it's a few years too late to talk you out of writing again, but this just really sucks.