All Comments on 'Descent into Debauchery Pt. 01'

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Anonymousover 4 years ago

Great read

So glad to see a new story I don't think I've heard on here.

As for feedback, there is some "online" repetition in the cited sentence below that could be trimmed. Otherwise, it was fabulous.

"They basically looked online quick search online and sorted the results starting with the cheapest"

sthsth over 4 years agoAuthor

Thanks.

Thanks for the feedback. Sorry about that. Typically I'm super conscientious of repetition like that. I agree, that kind of thing typically bugs me in stories as well. I think it breaks the flow. I'll try to be more careful next time.

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I just submitted part 3 of Unfinished Business. It should be up in a couple of days. Please let me know what you think. This chapter became a behemoth and had to be cut in half, so expect part 4 in January. Also, I am currently hard at work on two more stories. One was going t...

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