by 50ShadesOfDance
Definitely needs to continue.
It ended so quickly there is potential for more to happen
but it ended abruptly. and what on earth was the last para about?
I enjoyed your story a great deal. It's small, with a big heart. Thank you.
Well written. You could do a lot of different things now. Great start.
Enticing, and a great foundation for more chapters.
First aren't most of these stories just fantasy?
I like your writing style,,,,please continue...you have a flair for it.
So she basically rapes him, nice move, if it was a man doing it to an unconscious woman there'd be hell to pay!
Excellent read..I hope the story takes on a life of it's own at least for another chapter or two.