All Comments on 'Dessert'

I'd have given it a three if it wasn't one cliche after another. This story has been written hundreds of times and I might add much better.

Better luck next time.

Unlike Anon, I don't mind cliches at all. Keep it up ;)

Thank you for your feedback! It's my first story. I'm sure the next one will be better.

For a first submission, I thought this was really good. Keep Writing!