All Comments on 'Developing Pt. 01'

All fathers and sons should experience such uninhibited love.

This is great. Please please please make more

The next part is pending now so should be up within a week or so. I agree that fathers and sons should be able to be comfortable and get off openly with each other.

While I appreciate and even like the major content of this story, I feel compelled to point out that the dialogue between Jake and his Father during the sex scene is directly lifted from Joe Gage’s “Doctors and Dads” #1, scene 3: “Marine Dad.”

This is disappointing for many reasons.

1. Not only is that movie a personal favorite, it’s also fairly well known. So if I noticed it, I’m sure many other readers will also.

2. Like I said before, I really enjoy this story, and none of the rest of it is plagiarized, as far as I can tell. You seem like a perfectly capable author! Why steal dialogue which is far less titillating than the remainder of your story?

3. By posting content which violates Copyright law, not only have you committed a felony, but you also risk the website you’ve posted it to being taken down by court order. I love this site, as I’m sure you do. Please don’t get it taken down because of your stupidity.

4. Plagiarism is a despicable crime. As an author, you should cherish and protect Integrity above all else, and your peers and audience will rarely, if ever, will continue to read your work once they learn of it.

So, overall:

😮😡👎

Unless a quick and fairly painless edit. Then:

👍👏😈

-Professor Coal

That's very good, but I wish they had shot into each other's mouth and swallow family seeds...

Really bad. Clearly english is not your first language. You used a completely incorrect word in many places, such as straggling instead of straddling, and lingerie is underwear…