All Comments on 'Disciple'

If Ardent was so cool and professional in the way she conducts her work why did she feel the need to fire four more rounds into an already dead man? You said she took careful aim the first time. Does not fit.

Also, and hate to even say this, a person shot in the head collaspes in a heap. The impact of the shot would not be strong enough to drive a body backwards even at close range. If anything, his body would have fallen out of the chair he was sitting in. These details are important in such a short story where everything needs to hang together.

The story line is interesting, speaking to the raw behaviors of depraved groups witih extreme views of the world and how good people can be used by well intentioned organizations. Organzations that may contain such individuals themselves, tied to an ideal, not necessarily to a common morality or the human condition.

Yikes, now that is a horror story. What he left unsaid is the worst horror.