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Click hereI quickly wiped myself down, and noticed her eying my penis one last time.
"It's...softer now." She whispered.
"Yeah, you...you tired it out. " I winked and smiled. She laughed, again looking pleased with herself.
We quickly finished cleaning up, did a double check on each other, adjusted our clothing to make sure everything was back in place, then shared one last, lingering kiss.
I looked her in the eye, resolved to tell her my feelings. "Amy, I... I lov..."
"Hush." She said, cutting me off. "We gotta go! Now!"
We crept down the path, back the way we came. I could hear the sounds of the party again as we came to the end of our tree cover.
We stopped, peaking out cautiously, seeing who may be looking in our direction.
It looked clear, and I was about to step out when Amy stopped me.
"Wait," she whispered. "I'll go first. My mom knows I like to visit that clearing alone sometimes. I tell her I pray out there, but I really just go to get away from them and be alone sometimes. If she or someone else sees me coming out alone, that's my story, that I slipped away for a quiet moment of prayer."
You genius, I thought as I smiled admiringly at her.
"You wait a few minutes. If I get back without questions, I'll head right for the house, wash my suit off better and make sure to rinse this towel out. Wait till I'm in the house, then come out. If anyone questions you, tell them..." Here she paused, hesitated.
"I'll tell them I had to pee and the bathroom was occupied. Embarrassing, but better than the truth" I whispered back.
She smiled. "That will work, good thinking. Ok here I go. Oh one last thing..."
She paused, kissed my lips quickly, touched my cheek gently...
"...I love you too."
Then she turned, and stepped out from the trees, walking slowly back towards the yard.
(To be continued...?)
- COMMENTS
ScottishTexan9 months agoI found a couple of problems. The first being that these two teenagers are supposedly being raised by extremely conservative and devout parents. But their dialog doesn't really reflect such an upbringing. I grew up with a lot of exposure to other teens who had parents such as this. They would curse when they were in a rebellious mood and far away from the adults. However they were careful not to break the Third Commandment in the process.
They didn't use "Holy", "God", or "Jesus" in connection with any expletives. They even stayed away from Robin, The Boy Wonder style things like "Holy Bank Trucks, Batman!" So a lot of Amy's dialog seemed out of place to me.
Speaking of which, there's a continuity error of sorts when Amy stumbles on repeating the word "cock". She had just finished exclaiming "Holy Crap" and then a few lines later she can't say "cock". The narrator then explains:
"She flinched at the word, not used to using or hearing the "dirty" words too often I suppose."
Not more than a paragraph or two later she's cursing some more. 🤔
You should rewrite the line to indicate that she has difficulty using descriptive words or slang for genitalia instead so that it makes more sense. In case you don't know, it is very easy to submit edits for your already published stories. Feel free to email me if you need any help with it.
It's a pretty good little yarn, but because of the above issues, I voted 4/5.
Marklynda2over 1 year agoAh, discovery can be so much fun. A well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memory?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.
Anonymousover 2 years agoThis is well-written and enjoyable. My only quibble is you don't say when this story took place. If you want us to believe an 18-year-old woman, even a virgin, has only seen a (flaccid) penis in a textbook or a drawing you should have set it before the advent of the internet. If this is supposed to be fairly recent, her utter innocence is unbelievable.
For the person squawking about "Anonymous" - I guess your real name is Bottom_up?
Anonymousover 2 years agoVery nice premise.
Good buildup. But once sex starts it moves along too fast. What was the rush to have him cum tight away? Not enough playing with her boobs once they were bare. And no real description of boobs or nipples.
Four stars.
Djmac1031over 2 years agoAuthorPart 2 is now up. You can find it here :
https://www.literotica.com/s/discovering-amy-pt-02
