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All Comments on 'Discovering the Freeuse Housemaid'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Tenses all over the place. It was a good idea but the execution was poor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Sorry, I got bored at the end of page 1. But I guess you wrote this with the premise that a sexy voice would read this, and the sexy voice would carry the story. It needed more character motivations and setting the scene, and the grammar is a bit off.

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Hi y'all, I'm Gowonzu. I write usually NSFW and SFW scripts for GWA and it's sister subs on Reddit, but occasionally I'll post short stories here. https://www.reddit.com/user/gowonzu2scripts Don't expect high-quality content, I'm not a professional writer. Nor do I strive t...