All Comments on 'Do You Dare'

Felt it could have ended at the bar

Like the story so far as page 5 but on previous page the score was 28 vs 27. Then on page 5 it’s 32 vs 24. Because of the 2 dare challenge from losing the race. Not sure it effects overall story, but it’s a glaring mistake.

I am in as far as page three. Thoroughly intrigued.

Am voting now, as I am sure it won't fail from here. Am going to print it to be able to finish the story.

Duncan

you had me until the basketball game . that is where I lost interest in the story as thats when the story changed from dare to (couldn't come with anything here) was going with five stars until then so it ended with a 3 star. Pappasleaze!

It was a really hot story at the beginning with ashley and jennifer seeming to create a friendship from the dares but it fell off a bit when it was revealed that mike was in on it, then the basketball game completely ruined it, from there it just went from a hot humiliation to just bullying and debasing ashley

Very good story, would love to fulfill some/all of the dares. Maybe Jennifer could have been a bit more degrading and forceful with Ashley in the 12 hours she had to control her. The basketball game was a good reward for Ashley rather than humiliating. Keep writing your stories, they are very good.

This story was EXCELLENT because it gave amazing details that you could see all of this happening. Please keep writing.

Amazing story the details were great . Would have loved anouther page detailing the fantasy tho was looking forward to that, as soon as I read that was what Jennifer was doing . And maybe anouther story about how Scott gets with Ashley and they build a relationship and explore more .

Started off good but the ending was crap and if I was Ashley I think Jennifer would be dead afterwards.

with the dare ashley gets Jessica to clean her feet! the author have doubled up that story needs to b edited!

Somewhere between atrocious and ridiculous plot line. Lack of understanding of English composition and sentence structure. Jumping from present to past tense in the same sentence. Does not deserve even half a star.

Very nice start!

Escalates way to fast, and the whole basketball thing.... no idear why anyone would watch that.

Grate story and set up. Appreciate the thought that goes into these where the whole sinario is revealed to be a competent set up.

Well done and hope you continue to submit stories