All Comments on 'Doctor Susan, First session'

Nice story, looking forward for the next part.

Very nice. I see it’s your first story and you are off to a great start. A few graphical errors so some editing might be a good idea. Otherwise I like your way of thinking.

Its a pretty good story. You certainly have a lot of potential.

This isn’t a perfect piece of work. I know my first time posting a story on here wasn’t perfect. I had written flash fiction before hand and didn’t know how to properly ask for an editor on here.

You certainly have interesting ideas. Good pacing and good scenes. The editing aspect is the biggest issue you. Other than that, I think this is a pretty good, self contained, story. I enjoyed it (:

Thanks for all the feedback guys!

not bad for a first

Wow!

Great little story loved it.

Will there be a second session.?