All Comments on 'Doing Time Ch. 01'

You've got me chomping at the bit! LOL!

Hopefully tomorrow.

As you said it does nothing but set a scene yet to come. Why draw this out instead of writing a story and letting it out? Sorry I dont like very short stories broken into segments that allow you to forget things before the next segment comes out.

good start to a good story. Now a days stories a giving a good starts especially in "Loving wives" category. It's good you submitted all three chapters. I can't hardly wait to read the next chapters. Oh!!!! I wish I had a time machine. Thank you for the good story.

I like the set up in the story. Looking forward to the other chapters.

You reference a supposedly previous story with an actual name and author, But it doesn't exist. Why did you bother to do that?

I do not understand the logic of making this a three-part story. This was only a few paragraphs. I suspect the writer craves these comments and finds he gets more comments if he posts chapters, rather than stories. I suggest the readers try to discourage this bad behavior with low scores.

These short introductions are encountered from time to time and it always difficult to rate them. Not rating really seems like the fairest thing, as you have no idea of how the story may or may not hold together. But nearly always, when an author comments, they say they want to be rated. This intro opens up a lot of possible lines and is satisfactory in that respect, but it is so short that it is really annoying.

The Problem is the Prologue where the author states this will end up as a love story.

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what we do know is that Angela...James Merchant's wife did something really HORRIBLE... framed him a crime he did NOT commit and let him for another man.

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But James is STILL in love with her?

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Please... Love for GOD can someone in the UK Please act like man???

but this is too much of a tease from one of my favorite authors.

See what you think? I think it is crap

Well I'm hooked! The start gives us a whole lot of questions that will be answered soon I hope. As always, your way with words and a plot are great. Hope we see the next chapter soon! Thanks for your efforts.

While it is a good prelude to a story it is to short and to little to be much more than annoying. The author is to good to fall prey to games like this. Just put the story out there and leave the crap alone. Its not cute...

Where are we going?

The Dane

With so many loose thoughts of what is actually going on in the story, it's hard to make a determination yet on what the story is about. The facts: He was imprisoned for 8 years and some way has made some money while in prison. His wife has fucked over him,which caused his detainment, but he still has feelings for her, and that's all I know. I'll be watching for the next chapter,Thanks....Rich

what do you do when you miss a bus, train & flight??? You don't sit back & cry, You take another one, Right?? So why the hell James still miss his wife?? come on get a life. You know what, he got big amout now, a new car so what he should do?? SIMPLE seduce the young women from the bank. Lure her with gifts, maybe chocolates, take her for dinner in his new car, she give herself fuck her brain out. If she's good, loving & caring MARRY HER. SIMPLE. Bygones are bygones. Forget the past & live in present. Why cry for the wife who fucked his life.

Its an interesting and different start - lets wait a while before hurling missives against the walls of don't know whats to follow.

not even going to flip a coin or vote because i cease to read what or why or how am i going to think of or feel about or want to say ect,ect.!! what a shame - maybe my mistake and you all will enjoy - but if i wanted a suspense story i would not be on here. tnxbtnthx

So far it just appears to be crap. I will read 2 more paragraphs and if nothing improves I will move on.

Incomplete and unexplained how a just released excon has money for a new Jaguar XKR. I see that as impossibe so the story gets the lowest rating.

Interesting start. I don't understand previous comments condemning this without knowing anything about it. Well, you know I'll continue...

Thanks for sharing.

and with 8 years of confinement. He succeeded. TK U MLJ LV NV

Let's see where this is going. It's free, mentions Lit, and I have nothing better to do.

What 26thNC said. Signed: BTW

Not enough to go more than average

You just drop the story off a cliff? WTF?

She utterly destroys him and HEs still carrying a torch?

Good beginning! I wish you were still writing regularly.

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I've never understood why a man, after his wife had completely destroyed him, still "Loves her". It's simply ridiculous.

Soldier of Fortune marks author as talented.

Using utter nonsense plotting, should be beneath him.

Good start.

You little cock tease, you.