All Comments on 'Doris, the Grandmother Ch. 02'

Find someone to edit your stories before you post them. Could of, would of, should of are not actual words and it ruins the flow of the story.

I'm not sure that the previous commentator is in a position to credibly criticise your writing; fgtresd xs, cgbhhh xs and ddssa xs are not actual words...

Also, when critiquing somebody's work, maybe it would be an idea to ensure that you punctuate your writing correctly: Could of, would of and should of. You may also, want to ensure that your grammar is correct if you have the urge to be pedantic; you do not define what 'it' is when you talk about 'the flow ', unless you actually meant 'they', as in the clauses 'could of, would of, should of'. Thanks in advance.

I loved it! Please hurry upand get to the bedroom fucking! I just can't wait to read it! Good job so fqr!

Need that next chapter badly!

Hot as Hell, I love big tits to cum on. Jacked my dick to while reading

Hot story. I love the dirty mouth on Doris. As for grammar and punctuation, It was fine. It didn't get in the way of my reading and understandiung the plot and dialogue and action. Speaking of critiquing, the critiquers who critiqued your story based on grammatical slip ups need to relax with that shit. Like I said, If it's obvious that a story was written by an adult, it passes in my class.

As far as the well-intentioned critiquers of the critiquers of your work, If they are going to correct grammar and provide corrections to malaprops and other snafus, they really, REALLY should check their samples before posting. It is never 'could of, would of, or should of'. Those are supposed to be contractions of 'could have, would have and should have (could've, would've and should've). But it's not a big deal to me.

Great story, need more. 4 1/2 stars. I could've posted 5, but yeah, that needs fixin'.

Chapter 3 please,