All Comments on 'Down'

Scary shit, good story.

Your story-telling skills are incredible. This tale is indeed the stuff of nightmares, compellingly told. Deadly!

That was pretty damned creepy. What a horrible revenge Lena exacted on Paul - even though he did deserve it. Extremely well written, thanks for the read.

I say that with jealous admiration and love. Marry me?

by the supernatural. Striking imagery and highly original plot. Excellent read. Good luck in the contest.

A gothic horror story, Twilight Zone style. I liked the way it slowly unfolded about the real relationship between the protagonist and the women in his life. At first, I thought he was just overindulging to get over a divorce. Then bit by bit realization begins to dawn, so that when I read the gang rape scene, my only thought was --- "don't let it be over too soon." Very well done.

What a great original story! Very well written!! Ah, sweet revenge! Good Luck in the contest!

until everything got tied together at the last part. I like stories of revenge against people who have it coming to them.

Great revenge tale. I loved how you're sucked into feeling a little bad for the guy at first, thinking he's just a dime a dozen shithead. When all is revealed, you love seeing what comes to him.

I'm officially affected. I won't say how! Well written, and I like the plot. A lot!

Both his fate and the high praise for your story.

That was pure, cold revenge with a twist.

Maharat

perfectly paced... gritty, disturbing, and wickedly inventive

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"Down" = hands down contest winner!!!

Brilliant.

A wonderfully complex story - erotic horror, yes, but even more erotic justice. Sublime descriptive power and superb narrative flow. I think I smell a winner.

Yep, this is the one.

That's all I gots to say 'bout that! ;)

It initially felt like pieces of the story were missing (and would stay missing), and I almost had convinced myself it was one of "those" entries. Then damn--am I glad I stuck with it! The styled tale sucked me in and presented -precisely- the amount of information I needed to complete the picture. It was a twisted and original horror theme, but the "how" of it will stick with me long after I've forgotten the details--took a lil faith on the reader's part, but this ended up feeling like a perfectly constructed short.

Sooo creative, This is the first erotic horror story I've read to the end. I really enjoyed it. I was uncertain about your gender at first, then I checked your bio; Geez I should have known; Hell hath No fury...

I've never been so impressed by a story on this site. Quite disturbing and dark, it reminded me of an old English TV series called Tales Of The Unexpected.

What a powerful, gritty, hauntingly horrifying piece of work this is. The tightly controlled pacing pulls the reader along with grim inevitability. I couldn't stop, or even slow down, my reading, even when I wanted to pause to enjoy some delicious phrasing or imagery. What excellent work. My only regret is that I didn't see it before the contest ended.

Gritty...terrifying...well-paced.... You very well may be the best author on Lit. I'm seeing shades of Ann Rice.... Hmmmm... are you really Ann Rice??? LOL!

Ye Gods you do know how to twist the tail of the reader. I almost didn't read it all, as the first part didn't seem to have the character depth of your other stories, but then you added a little wee temptner of the missing friend. Brilliant, wonderfully twisted.

That was wow!

In this story you've made the erotic horror board exactly what it should be. Thank you.

horror and sexy/// and a great twist a great story

excellent story!! you gave absolutely no clues where this was going to end up. very cleverly written. thank you!

good revenge. I especially like the old witch at the end

Very well done! Very well done! I'll admit that often times I skim because stories can get boring and repetitive, but not this one. I love the twist with 'Lena' and I loved the essence in which you used her to haunt him!

Utterly loved it! Especially the end, where the old woman tries to teach him how to get revenge on the MAN that did this to him... NO REVENGE for him!! Ever...

...VERY disturbing indeed!

Wow! What a narrative!

Sort of refreshing type of story, very well done.

This was perfect. Noncon can be fun as a fantasy, but this is an incredible way of depicting actual rape.

wow brazenly wow damn that paul bastard doesnt even use lube while fucking girls ass

Sucks to be Paul... This story sure plays with the mind, wasn't sure what was going on for a while.