All Comments on 'Down by the Creek'

Paragraphing would make the story much easier to read.

Both of your first stories are very entertaining and well written. I hope you have more to share.

Short, sultry tale, immediate, engaging. So arousing to 'discover' someone else, increases the thrill, and lovely when the sighting pays dividends afterwards.

I was told to keep them short due to reading on a screen. There must be a happy balance.