All Comments on 'Downfall - An Erotic Invasion Ch. 01: Makeout Point'

I loved this writing. Very visual and I was completely there. Curious of the next part

Your explanation of her feelings at that moment were very lucid, and a good recounting of that 'first-love' indecision. Now you've captured our interest in a different way! Is Chad gone forever? Is Lisa destined to remain a virgin? Only the Doll knows!

~B

I liked the suspense that you started to build at the end of this. Fuck yeah! Aliens and missing boyfriends! This is my cup of tea.

I was a little thrown by the Chad going right back for sex. It was the one thing that threw this off from being an opening for a chilly, classic horror opening. You rocked that car hard enough to throw them apart, someone should have screamed or panicked a little bit.

That's my only dig. I really like this opening.