All Comments on 'Dr Mabuse SOI: Paige's Story'

Great story. I liked the story line. Very erotic.

wonderful story.one of the best things about it is that it is open for several more chapters

ibeen dreaming long and hard over seeing my husband and daughter together this story had parts of the dream and fantasys i felt in last two years like seeing my daughter with her gfs and with me and with her dad the best part was how loving they all were together ty ty ty

Great story, sensuous and well thought out.

Please watch the grammar, maybe getting a good editor

would be helpful.

We needs a follow up with details of the foursome. Also I bet if they really tried they could bed Connie.

You could do a follow-up on the seduction of Connie by kathy and then a story about her college adventures and bringing her playmates home to meet they family.

DON'T KEEP US WAITING.

too confusing to keep up with the characters, so I gave up. Strange the daughter didn't have her own key to the house....

Be careful with the random pov changes and with wrong tense. It's too confusing to read when you switch pov inside the same sentence or paragraph. Also, your spell checking program is spoiling the flow in places by replacing wrong words I suspect.

Wanted to like this one but it was too clumsy.

Tommy was on his knees next to me watching his daughter move her tongue in and out of her mother's pussy. I reached over with one hand and began to stroke her husband while enjoying the tongue massage.

Yes, your point-of-view changes are horrible. That one was just a single example. It really detracts from the story. As for your spell checking, I wonder if it's your computer or if English is NOT your first language. This all ruined what should have been a good story.

Hot sex but writer switched person and POV which distracts from the read. Get an editor to help.

Thank you for sharing this BEAUTIFUL story... you are very talented!