by Vjax
Every single time I read one of your submissions to this story, I end up either smiling or crying. Thank you again for yet another awesome chapter in this series. It just keeps getting better and better. You are an amazing writer. Can't wait for the next part!
Which gets better with each chapter. I'm playing catch up with this story so can't wait to read the next 2 chapters that are already up. The pace and details unfolding create a sense of an exquisite banquet of a delicate and well seasoned narrative. Can't wait to devour the subsequent dishes in this elaborate meal of many courses.
In this chapter the lack of editing made it harder to enjoy the story. Especially the sudden switches into present tense. But, I suppose, after almost two years, you are probably aware of it.
The story is still interesting, though.
He comes across as more schizophrenic than depressed. He's too inconsistent.