All Comments on 'Dumped'

And hopefully the story continues. Nicely done on the story. Keep up great work!

Good quick story. Gonna continue? So many directions this could go.

Good story. Too bad she’s on the pill. Love to read more about them.

I like longer stories and more flushed out characters but this was pretty good

Beautiful story. Pls. Continur

This seems to be another story about a female character having a shaved pussy. She is crying alone and it becomes crying to her brother at the beginning, and it is because her boyfriend broke up with her. This is a SHAVED pussy story. Could her problem be similar to other women having a shaved pussy. Problems with razor burns, chaffed flaking skin, bumps, pimples, and boils, with nasty sharp stubble growing out of the pimples that ooze out pus on a mound, along with numerous ingrown hairs on her mound. Of-course not!! This is the one lady who can shave down there, and not ever have any of that stuff to go on / happen to her. The story itself works. The lead-ups are ok, and they do work for what this author is attempt to do. I would have rated the story much higher had it not been for the shaved pussy and had there been an appropriate amount of body hair described on this character's mound, "This is just another one of those smooth shaved pussy, stories."

The start of a great relationshop

Thought it was great as is....

Nicely done

too short

Nicely told tale until you went third person,

Then, little variances kept comming up that should have been caught in edit or Proof Reading.

Great potential, as a porn writer if you can check yourself in your writing.

short but very nicely done

When I started reading this story, I was really wanting to give you a 5 for it. I'm a total sucker for "the brother comforts sister" genre. Whether he's comforting her after a death in the family, or a tragic breakup in her relationship, or anything else, it's a great lead for a brother/sister incest story. Unfortunately, you exploited the opportunity poorly.

I don't know if you were intentionally trying to keep this short. 🤔 But you succeeded by having an extremely poor background and motivation for your characters. It was pretty much just a puppet show with you pulling the strings. The whole transition from brother/sister love into loving couple's sexual congress felt forced and awkward. 😳 Your characters were going through the motions because you directed them to, not because of their own feelings and set of circumstances.

This was so poorly written that I should give you a 2. Be thankful that I didn't. 3/5

So after I posted my comment, I started reading back through what others were saying. That's when I spotted a comment posted anonymously that begins: "This seems to be another story about a female character having a shaved pussy."

This same person has said the same exact things anonymously on other brother/sister incest stories. I wish that he/she would use their account alias. I completely agree with what their opinions are on shaved pubic hair. I'd like to figuratively shake their hand. ✋

CINCO ESTRELLAS...hot!