All Comments on 'Dungeon Builder's Harem Book 01 Ch. 01'

Not quite sure where this is going... but I like it. It's nice to have something a bit different on here!

So, there I was, minding my own business, when i saw you had a new story out. I thought, why not I your writing. I started reading, then i lost track of time and the chapter ended... I mean... it ended!!!! You sucked me in with a nice incest/succubus scene, some angst between him and his older sister. His 19 year old hormones making him drool over all the women in life, and he is clueless that his neighbor who has breakfast at his house, secretly drools over him. I can not wait for the next chapter. Bravo.

No idea where this is going but it fits the genre at least. Hope it will become your usual awesome work.....

decent prologue to an isekai plot, but why list all the characters at the start when most of them are completely irrelevant to the chapter? looking forward to more.

the guy has a really small mind ,(just nineteen ) it's normal for guys to drool over girls but he brakes the rules that's too many rules but I like how the family seems like happy and caring for each other so far so I hope you keep writing the story.

when the main character thinks of sex and wants to play with him self right off makes him self' has a very small mind and you would think he is just a perv,''well I think hey he just like me '' your sopposed to be hero not someone who is just a well you know what I mean. I like your Idea though. Dont get disharden '(thats a joke)'can't wait for the next chapter

Yo that’s way too many characters to remember god damn

The characters act below their age. @ 19, they should be in a relation or finished one if your HS beau left for a distant college. 'KISSING' chant is for grammar school. If one sis can saunter about in panties and call bro a perv, is it then okay for him to walk about in boxers? If he's tenting? Is she a perv for noticing? Could use some editing to remove excess wording and tighten sentences. Just saying...3.5 stars. I'll keep reading

Anon56

Painful death in chapter one always has promising results.

Why does Maya hang around him though?

Man, just the first few paragraphs and immediately the story's put of whack. Dude calls out a "forbidden twat" and then says it "can't be" his sister. Well, it's already forbidden, so the MC already accepted that the "twat" is "forbidden" because it belongs to his sister.

Ugh. I can juat see this story unceremoniously roll downhill from hereon out...

Ah, I see you're a man of culture as well.