All Comments on 'Duty Ch. 01'

This is an intriguing fantasy story, and has great potential, but the introduction is too brief, and the love scene, although written well, is much too short. However, short as it is, this first chapter promises to be the start of an exceptional series. Hopefully, the author will do so. Good fantasy stories are hard to find.

Just wanted to say thank you to everyone who takes the time to read and leave feedback!!! I’ve never written any kind of story or dialogue in my life before. so I’m hoping to grow and improve! <3