All Comments on 'Ed and Diane, a second chance'

Aw, shucks. That is a sweet story, thank you. The details of Lisa's death were well concealed, although you gave some hints. That gave the story some added tension and release as all was revealed. Very nicely done.

Wow! Very strong & emotional. Thank you! 5*

The ending was a little quick and could easily had another chapter. 5 stars none the less. Keep writing!

Liked the story, but please find an editor/proofreader.

Great first story!

5

That was an excellent first story. 5stars

This is a great first story with some interesting, strong characters. I enjoyed reading it, and I hope to read more in the future if you’re willing. I have to echo fixer43, though. A thorough editing job would improve this story a lot.

Thank you for writing, and thank you for sharing your work.

Good buildup and character development. The ending was a bit sappy but overall an enjoyable story.

Little too syrupy for my taste, but a good story nonetheless. 4*

An intriguing blend of schmalz and sorrow. Well done. 5 stars

Too melodramatic for me, visions of dead wife and kids, his future family....

A five until the last paragraphs, they the author destroyed the romance for me.

Story was nice until the gay injection of the daughter's wife. Why does this theme have to do with this story? I get tired of people pushing the idea that gayness is everywhere and should just part of the natural society. It is only a small part of the general population.

Great job. Keep writing.

Great job. Keep writing.