All Comments on 'Ellie's Pee'

More Please

I look forward to another chapter.

Pretty well done. Not too fast or too much, while pulling on the heart strings of both characters. This reader would like more...

I loved it

Id give it! Even better would've been him going down on her before the shower, then again after they effed in the shower! But hey I'm a perv lol! Great story, thanks for sharing here!

Congratulations!

Nice start, sexy, natural and leaving plenty of room to develop your story! Enjoyed.

I like how you combine both, loving interest for the partner and sexual arousal. Keep both elements alive, and future installments will find me as a happy reader!

I enjoyed this immensely, and no coarseness involved at all! Example - “I’m ready for you baby” instead of .... well you get the picture.

Well done! This is such a beautiful portrayal that is really easy to relate to. Very well written too! You should be very proud of yourself. I hope you keep writing :)

Beautiful story!

Good start

Good start I think. Well written.

Great story. Very hot and hardening. Well written. Try to let your fantasy really flow... . I felt you wanted to go darker and I'd have welcomed it.

Very enjoyable read, well written, enjoyed your characters, look forward to the next chapter.

Great, well written

Well written and sexy as hell!!

Great writing. I would have liked several more pages.

keep writing it reminds me of the first time my wife and I showered together a lot of years ago!!!

A very good start. Men always find it erotic when a girl pees. Keep going.

Nice start, thanks.

Very hot!

That is one Hot Story. I Love to watch and Listen to a Woman taking a Nice Long Pee. MMMMMMMM!