by ViTaMiN87
Definitely keep writing! Maybe add more transition and then definitely a follow up where Emily gets to the clothing optional beach, with or without her new friend. She sounds like she could be an excellent character with many more future stories.
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I'm sorry if you were offended. I think a story is more interesting as a narrative arc if the main character goes through hell before a happy ending comes, whether in erotica or a literary novel. Obviously this is nowhere close to the literary realm, so I still needed to try to write "going through hell" in a way that some people might find arousing. I'm sorry that it didn't hit the mark for you.
Now we have the hero, the heroine and the bad guy. This could lead to a very interesting two weeks. Whatever you do keep going!
Why is it that some assholes can only get off if a woman is being humiliated?