All Comments on 'Endangered Ch. 10'

Hilarious and great story. Just enough science for me to think I'm kind of following along, lul

Priceless, what a great tale that’s both serious and hilarious. I can’t get anything done, I can’t put it down. 10 stars.

I found this series yesterday and I'm still reading with all my free time! You had me LOL a bunch of times this chapter.

5 stars for every part so far!

I think back to when I started reading this 14 hours ago {and basically didn't stop). To think we began with a young Laramie farmboy losing his virginity and now he's causing nuclear explosions on the Mon _with_his_mind_.

I'd call it "mission creep" but somehow the narrative just flows along plausibly regardless (for a given value of "plausible")

In any case, should I forget to mention it later: I'm loving this! Thank you.

Oh my you had me rolling hard with laughter

Amy's lines are perfect. The whole moon scene priceless.

Hope your well and writing more

Good luck and happy holidays.

Thank you for this amazing story

Nothing better to do today...lets fly to the moon, create a new star and be back for dinner.

What were you thinking bro...?

Anon honestly,

Of course he's making mistakes. That's consistent with his character. He's a teenager you stupid fuck.

"He only blew it up a little bit, dear," Susan reached over the couch to put her hand on her shoulder. "The Moon will be just fine."

Quote of the week right there.

Honestly, I only have two issues with this story. Chris is an absolute idiot. He has very little depth other than the naive fresh off the boat kinda idiot that doesn't really develop. He jumps from one huge mistake to another and with a little aweh shucks and a big dick everyone's like welllllll your dick is huge, so it's okay. Would be nice to see him develop into an actual character at some point in the story.

The second is the pacing, what started as a sci-fi/fantasy coming if age adventure, turned into a new fast and the furious movie, went from slow substance and world building to all flash, no substance. Most of the characters don't even get screen time anymore, there's little to no character development and a lot of the plot points just stopped getting mentioned at all. Trying to fix all the world's problems, could have definitely waited until things had been more established.

I enjoy your writing, the original premise of the story was great, but it feels like that premise got lost somewhere, your world building is phenomenol but characters need a lot of work.

"It's huevo rancheros..." equals '...dipped his flat bread into the bowl of warm soup...'?

Not in any world I'm aware of . Huevos Rancheros is, literally, ranch eggs; food-wise, it is fried eggs with warm salsa over them.

It is NOT a soup, NOT served in a bowl, and once again: on, but for five minutes of research.

It's sad, actually, such an imaginative & creative sci fi tale is repeatedly beat up by sloppiness in the mundane aspects. IE: it is NOT proper to use UK spellings of certain words when those words are part of the name of a US governmental department. The correct name is the Department of Defense, NOT the Department of Defence. That is just plain sloppy, and laziness, at its core.

Between the sloppiness and glaringly inaccurate technical aspects, (inaccuracy EASILY avoided with MINIMAL research), and much more than not knowing what huevos rancheros is, (see previous comments I've made, on several different issues), a solid 5 star sci fi plot, and character development is drug down to a 3.5-4.5, overall.

This has to be one of the best multi-chapter story arcs I've read on this site!

I just finished binging the series and am eager to see more! Glad to see that you are on Patreon and have signed on as a supporter to keep abreast of the progress toward your next chapter! Keep up the great storytelling!

I just want to say that space dragon = best dragon.

Teleporting halfway across the United States safely, requires momentum change.

I am 100% in agreement with hating the wait times for great products and agree with both the good and bad sides of his/her argument. I don't so much mind waiting when we get 15-20 Lit pages all at once and the quality sets such a high bar that non-erotic sci-fi/fantasy authors can't come close. HOWEVER, I'm now going to have to read the whole story from the beginning just so I can remember who the characters of the harem are and what interactions they have had with each other.

I would REALLY, REALLY appreciate an encyclopedia for this story so I can look up a character name and get a brief description of who they are and any important events that they took part in. I pretty much remember what I need to know about Chris and Annabelle, and I remember bits and pieces about his dragonesses, but I can't remember who the vampiress was and I have no idea where Amy came from. I remember Immi and Hailey alright, and I think that might be because of how unique they are as characters, but he has such a huge harem that women and their names are bleeding together.

My suggestion would be to give each character a fairly short description, a description of any major plot events they took part in, and some stats such as: race, age, appearance, relationships to other characters, first appearance in story (Lit ch & pg numbers), and major plot occurences (again, ch & pg). I know that would be a lot of work, but it is also something that a fan could put together for you to post. It could be laid out as a monolithic glossary in alphabetical order, or there could be a separate glossary for each chapter.

Anyway, it's just a suggestion, and maybe I'm the only person with this problem. If I knew for a fact that the story would eventually be finished one day and I didn't have to wait 5 more years for that day to come, I would just wait for the last chapter and read it all at once. As it is, far too many stories posted here either never end, or are never finished, so I take what I can get when I can get it.

Other than that little complaint, please

Radek = Dr. Henry Killinger and his magic murder bag.

One of the better stories here.

Thanks guys! It could release any day now. I really appreciate all the support and feedback. I hope you enjoy this next chapter, it's a bit of a different pace to the last few.

Dude, this is the absolute worst of not being able to have our cake and eat it too.

I've been reading this story since 2013 and it's some of the very best Lit has to offer. But, it takes FOREVER in between releases! I know there is a lot of hard work and real life juggling that takes place on your end, but on our end we wait for months and months at a time for a story most of us will probably read in a few hours or less, and then it's back to months and months of waiting.

Please take this with a grain of awesomeness, and don't change a thing you're doing. The diligence you put into your writing is why everyone is chomping at the bit. We all appreciate your communication, we are all on the edge of our seats waiting for the next chapter, and we are all positive it will be incredible.

Keep up the great work!

I'm not impatient, I swear. It just gets so interesting after a long wait to get more of the story of the characters. In my opinion, this is actually slightly better than Three Square Meals in terms of actual story plots and character development. Tefler keeps coming back again and again to his characters experiencing fears that they should have overcome already, and a lot of the plot is quite repetitive. The detail isn't exciting, it's boring. I don't need to know every meal they had, or how it was cooked, or how they all sat down in the lounge at the end. Your story is much more tightly written and gets to the meat and boning (haha) with great pacing.

Don't tell Tefler I said any of this though.

Itpc, thank you for the update. We'll be able to hang on however long is necessary, (and those who can't can go support your patreon for early access). I'm probably just as bad as everyone else for being impatient, (I was checking literotica multiple times a day after your last announcement) but I think that just goes to show how great your work is. And your work really is great, btw. :) We all eagerly anticipate the next chapter and know it'll be worth the wait. I know it probably gets annoying to be constantly asked "when is the next chapter". I just hope you take it to mean how excited we are and not as a sign of entitlement from your readers.

Sorry guys, you're going to have to chill just a little longer. I've been busy at work, and also allowing editors time to thoroughly go over the chapter. Now I need to combine and revise from several different sources into the final piece. Hopefully that shouldn't take more than a few extra days, and result in a better product in the end. I'll update my bio when I submit to Lit. Thanks for your patience.

Oh Lord, please don’t let ltpc be dead!

Your writing are awesome but when are your next chapters coming?

It posted on Patreon on 28th Jan and I'm writing this on 8th Feb, meaning 10 days. Is there like a set amount of gap between Patreon release and Literotica release?

How much longer until the release. At least give us a rough idea when you are going to put it on here.

How long until release

28/01/2019 - Chapter 11 will be releasing soon on Patreon. After everything's been checked over for errors, then on to Literotica. Thanks for your patience.

This story is on the right track to rank up their with "Three square meals" and my other favorite series'. Don't rush it and keep that mind churning out the great ideas! I am on the edge of my seat with anticipation but this story is too good to rush!

Sorry, but I didn't feel like signing in to Lit to comment.

- Rebel Counsel

AMAZING!!!!

Thanks for the reply and even though I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter, it's worth it. Looking forward to it.

TK

Sorry, but at this stage I can't give you any firm estimation. I'm still working on refining the chapter and getting it edited up nicely. Work hasn't slackened off yet, and is unlikely to for another month or two at least. I'll keep you updated, but hopefully it won't take me that long to get the chapter out to you.

I see you're answering a few messages. Any news on when we'll be seeing ch 11. I know I said take your time but I'm really looking forward to read your story again.

TK

Thanks, that's very nice to hear even if it's not nearly up to those standards. I'm working toward the possibility of broader distribution quietly in the background, but it requires a fair amount of revision and thought. I'm more concerned with finishing the story at the moment, given that my time is so limited. Ultimately, this is a fun hobby for me, and there would have to be some serious changes in my life for that to be otherwise. Thanks again.

LTPC, I agree with the several comments that Endangered has broad appeal based on your clever and original story, sensitive interpersonal interactions, coming of age, humor and more. I am inarticulate to say more. Please don't dismiss the future possibility of broader publication. Write on!

Love your work! It’s honestly my favorite series on here! Keep up the good work. Please take your time with ch 11, I can’t wait to see it!

I've been following this story for a long time and am happy to wait for another amazing chapter rather than have you churn out something you're not proud of.

Your work is worth waiting for, LTPC. Post Ch11 when it's ready, and not a moment sooner. <3

All we can say is thank you for the update and we anxiously awaits chapter 11.

TK

I've written over 50k words for chapter 11 now and am trying to get it edited and completed. Unfortunately, I have a real job when I'm not writing online smut. This is the busiest time of year for me, nothing to do with the holidays. My work is seasonal and I have a short window to make the most of the year, and enough money to see me through. Though I wish it otherwise, I simply have very little time or energy to devote to writing at the moment. Thanks for your patience. It's coming about as fast as I can manage right now.

You should probably check what your phone keyboard is typing, @HappyPrick

I'm seachles and spell bound

Well written, great storry!

Can't say enough praise,!

But Hurry! Pease

Added to the ranks of Tefler, Conanthe, and Geller! You are rocking it!

Your link worked for me. There is an unnecessary space has been inserted between the link. Viewing on website version in mobile brower.

"C hriss" = "Chriss"

And that's a nice design. I was struggling to visualise this home. It's good to have a reference for that.

Sad that I made it to the end of the currently avalable but am happy that it is still going hope to see more and thank you.

Best story

Enjoying the story. Imaginative and well written. Looking forward to the next installment. Thanks for what you do, ltpc!

Some of the best things in life are free: Including this story.

New to the story and it was very good, awaiting next installment 5/5 all round.

This is what happens when astrophysicists and fantasy writers get together and decide to snort *all* the coke in the room. I love it.

- Wallstotheball, 2018

Funniest thing I've read for a long time!!!!

Also, ltpc, take your time, but hurry up. You have the full support of your fanbase here.

Great story line! anxiously awaiting next installment however long it takes.

I've read through a couple times what is already posted, and it never fails to enthuse.

Please stick to it. It's a really good read! Thanks so much for sharing.

Chapter 11 is up to 30k words but progress is slow. I'm super busy with my job at the moment so there's limited time and effort available for writing.

Thanks for the above 3-4 comments of encouragement (as well as others). It makes sitting down and hashing out a scene or two after an exhausting day that much more rewarding.

This is easily one of my favorite series on this site and am excited for the next chapter however long it takes for you to make it. I'm patient though and can wait. Keep up the great work!

So I just signed up on your Patreon. Totally understand the challenges of writing outside the restrictions imposed by living a normal life so to speak!

Loving your story, glad I came across it, also a Patreon supporter of Annabelle Hawthorne’s “Home for Horny Monsters”, and Tefler’s sci-fi horny space opera.

I think Tefler was once in your position… He now gets like $3000 per chapter and I think he has gone to full-time writing mode at this point. Good luck to you!

Just a little more feedback to keep us interested will help a LOT.

TK

Thanks for the feedback and support, very flattering.

Unfortunately I can't devote as much time to writing as I'd like due to my job. I'm sorry you feel that way about the chapter release time but there's not that much I can do, especially at this time of the year. I'll do what I can but please be patient.

I've been following your work for years. I know it takes a lot of time and dedication to your work and you have shown that through your attention to detail but writer to writer you need to pick up how quickly you're putting your chapters out there. Your research is fantastic and you keep me hooked. Honestly I'm more following this story to see where it goes because at this point you took long enough I no longer have to read the story for sexual satifaction because I got married and thusly it ruins some of the fun. Sorry, venting. Back to the speed of your putting out your stories. You probably are losing readers because although your storyline is fantastic and your erotica is both tasteful and satisfying its taking so long to put your chapters out there. Some people, like myself have waited so long for various chapters that its comprable to waiting for book sequels. I understand you are not Steven King or Tolkien but your skill is comprable. Apply yourself a little more to satisfying readers. When you started the story you made an obligation to your readers to finish the story. I had a friend whom ai put onto the story a few years back but sadly he will never get to see the end of it because he died in in accident. I commend you for your work and thank you for writing Itpc. I actually am going to refrain from using my account handle and if you were to reply to me, you don't have to but I would love to hear back from you, you may refer to me as Apocryphon

When I reviewed the comment the space in the link did not exist.

since I don't have any other work on my account it should be easy to find the layout.

If you want to look at Turk7Sr home layout you can go to his story page and click on the link there (it works for me)

Your link doesn't work at all

Reposting my link to the home layout since LTPC informed that my original link is broken.

I made a layout for Chris's cave home based on your description. though I took some artistic liberties and made the design flow better in my opinion.

https://www.literotica.com/i/endangered-chriss-cave-home

Hope that link works better.

I still can't wait for the next chapter!

Oops. Looks like my bio hasn't updated at all. Is this correct? I know I've posted at least two since the chapter came out but it doesn't look like they're showing on my author page.

Anyway. Chapter 11 is almost up to 24k words. Pretty slow progress now that I'm in my busy season at work again. I'll keep chipping away when I can and it will eventually add up to something resembling a chapter. Thanks for the patience and support!

Sad news for you, LTPC announced earlier that the next chapter will only be in the new year. I know he writes slow but I'm hoping it will be out soon. No ways I'm dropping him though.

Also check out the following writers. Tefler, Etaski, ElyssaCousland, DrowsDilemma, Surefoot and Erinaceous. All ongoing stories but very good and keep you reading for a long time.

TK

I am new to Lit. so I just found this story. I was really excited when I started, because it had 1O chapters so I knew it was a complete work. (I HATE waiting for new chapters!) I read all 10 within 3 days. By the time I got to chapter 10 I knew you weren't finished with it and I was right. NUT BUNNIES! Now I have to wait because there is no way that I want to forgo knowing more! Amazing job ...keep up the good work... and everything else I already heard multiple times already. By the way, I really love Ann and Bartolomew. I just wish we got to read about more time with just the two of them (Chris and Ann) talking everything over like they did in the beginning. She is his first after all. I think she took his going to the moon without their knowledge way too well for how you wrote her personality in the beginning, but I'm hopeful that you're just saving her private blowup at him for the next chapter. PLEASE don't take too long ok? And in case it wasn't clear, I love this story and will buy it when it comes out!!!

I can't wait for the next chapter! This has really become a great story! Thanks for writing it!

PLEASE!

This is a jewel among all the flotsam that is out there, thank you so much for writing this. I admit to thinking that they were going to the moon to collect a load of H^3 which is abundant up there, not naturally occurring on Earth, and great for fusion reactors, but you went a different way. I am curious to see what comes of it, but I know that if it is written as well as the chapters to date then I will enjoy every second of it.

I have left this story as a tab on my computer for six months and it has not disappointed. I have no plan to exit it. I can't wait for the next installment!

I made a layout for Chris's cave home based on your description. though I took some artistic liberties and made the design flow better in my opinion.

https://www.literotica.com/i/endangered-chriss-cave-home

Just checking, how is 11 coming along. I know you said that hopefully it will be out by December (very sad news) but a bit of an update will be helpful.

TK

I love this series I re-read the other chapters while you are working on the next one, by far my favorite series on this site keep it up and can't wait for the next chapter

Thanks! I had fun trying to make the dry science more interesting for the story whilst keeping it as accurate as possible. Quite a bit of research went into getting all the facts right, increasing my own understanding in the process. Keep up your own writing, you can only improve. I've noticed what I think is substantial gain in my own abilities as I continue to work on every new chapter.

I have read this chapter 3 times now and this last time I kept referencing your science used in the moon trip. Besides breaking down the science barney style you actually kept up with current understanding of space and nuclear fusion. I was impressed with your ability to describe a complex interaction of protons, neutrons, electrons, and photons in such a simplistic story interaction. Heck you even used a few words I had to google to check their meaning. The whole moon trip and the following living room scene was one of the best scenes so far. I am dying to know what happens next with Hailey and Chris meeting the president about their moon expedition. I wish you could hurry up and write the next chapter but at the same time I want it to be as well done and detailed as this one was. Part of me is jealous that you write such a wonderful story where I can't. Though if you keep this up I might just push myself to try writing again.

Bravo! Bravo! Good Sir!

I love this story. I really wish it was an actual book. I could read it over & over. After every chapter I'm like. Damn he needs 2 fuck her. Then the next chapter he does. I love how it's not just about sex also. Lol

Yeah, I find myself drawn into the trap of making Chris or the other characters semi-omnipotent at times. This isn't ideal, especially like you said for a 19 year old. Therefore I think it's good to have some mistakes, dumb, honest, or however they end up.

I love this story the plot and everything about it breathes amazing, I can’t wAit to see the next chapter in this amazing story, and honestly this story has amazing sex scenes and the best part is the sex is icing on the cake for this amazing story, it’s tied into the heart of the story unlike other posts where it’s forced or there for the hell of it this story makes it seem necessary to the development I mean come on how much better can this story get, I only see this story getting more and more popular never slowing down and hopefully one day we will see this become a novel, which I would happily buy

I'm thinking when Chris is being a moronic, "wow this is remarkably stupid, and out of character". Then I remember he is 19, and it's suddenly believable.

Yes, you're right that expanding the orb, even a little bit would have cooled the reaction. They also should have put safeguards in place. However, the reaction was much more successful than they were anticipating, and they got caught out. I've already mentioned this a little bit in what I've written of the next chapter.

I think we'll leave the CNO fusion cycle alone for the moment and iron implies supernova-like pressures. Maybe later.

As someone who's tried to write, I am in awe of the pace, excitement and enthusiasm you manage to get into your story. Even the sex scenes have plot development and surprises.

Thank you. I can't wait 'till the next one.

Wouldn't suddenly making the orb 100m in diameter have cooled the reaction rapidly?

Plus, with all the early experimentation, he forgot to do "self regulation" with this one?

Next time, have him take a couple kilos of as close to atomically pure iron and chuck it into the sphere. Fusing iron CHILLS the process. It uses up several times the energy it releases. Mind, you would have to go past fusing carbon to make it that far...

Honestly it’s extraordinary in its development and tempo, with just the right amount of real, and slightly far fetched (but still backed by solid thinking and reasoning) elements, to make this hands down one of my favorite stories thus far. You my dear writer, are a poet and scholar of tantalizing word play and story telling. I’m honestly ravenous to read more of this little patch of masterful imagination. So in closing... ya dun good m8.

It's going to be a VERY LOOOONG wait but worth it. Just do your best Ltpc

Maybe before Christmas. Maybe.

Waiting for the next one.....

This story keeps getting better and better, keep it up. Can not wait for more.

Great chapter. I really can’t wait for more chapters

Hard to add to the preceding comments just know I agree with the positive ones. Also, if my biology teacher would have made class half as entertaining as this story I would have paid a whole lot more attention and maybe gotten a better grade. Great work.

Still loving the series and cant wait for more chapters. The fusion arc was less interesting becouse we dont know what the practical need for it is.

Thanks. Change that to biologist and you're pretty much spot on.

I found this story by mistake on Monday now I can't wait for more chapters.

Awesome! Enough said.

And I was delighted to learn that Chris didn't actually kill anyone when he destroyed that stronghold! I was hoping he'd at least not killed any kids, but no deaths at all? Awesome. Altogether an absolutely excellent chapter. I can't wait to read about the reaction to the video of Chris fixing the flag on the moon! :-D

I LOVE this story. Thank you for keeping it alive.

So many times here on Literotica I've become totally caught up in a story, only to have the author disappear into the "ether," leaving the story unfinished and me heartbroken.

Love all of the characters, and the details keep the story "believable."

Please please please keep up the good work!

FOR A GOOD CAUSE!!!!!!!!!! LMFAO ROFL

I have devoured the last ten chapters in the last few days. Love this story. I can't wait to learn more about the gargoyle.

I have been reading the other comments. In essence everyone love your writing..

And that is why they seem frustrated and impatient when they finish reading..

But I would say, you take your own sweet time.. Well thats why you are able to produce such a wonderful story..

Worth the wait..

Keep going..

From another impatient fan of yours... ;-)

Sorry dude. It can't be helped.

I mean, damn, why would you want to end a chapter...?

You know how inconvenient it is to have to stop reading what you write...?

Now I have to wait for your next chapter... and not patiently at that, mind you... =)

It just keeps getting better, great story. I just wish the wait was shorter between each chapter, the wait is brutal. I want to know what happens next! Cant wait to see where you take the story.

It's hard to believe that this great story is getting better & better with each chapter . The sex is great & the science stuff is a bit beyond me but very important to the overall sense of the story , but to me , at least . it's the humor & personal relationships that make this story a cut above even some of the good tales here . It's nice to see Haliey has brains to go along with her bust , she's a excellent addition to the dragon brood . When you had the scene of Radek show up on the internet the first thing that popped into my mind was to sell it as a new Marvel special effects type movie , (glad to see great minds think alike (patting myself on back lol ) .Very fast thinking & action by Michelle . I hope the rest of the girls cut Lillian a little slack until they can get a schedule down to keep her from starving , her need for his blood & loving magic is different from the rest & 500 yrs of a selfish & demanding nature can't be swept away over night . Thank you again for all your hard work & looking forward to the next installment of your mesmerizing story & also thanks for taking the time to read & react to our ideas & comments .