All Comments on 'Enslaved by the Pen Ch. 10'

It's not the ending I wanted, but it's an ending I can accept, though barely. At the very least, Amelia should have told as many people as possible as part of an insurance plan against getting kidnapped again. The story tried to build Amelia up as an extremely resilient fighter who exhausted every fibre of her being to try and escape, so it follows that she should do everything in her power to guard against future threats once she DID get out. It took me less than a minute to think of this. Amelia had much more time and much more motivation. The complete failure to deliver was... disappointing. And I blame the author. Personally, I would have favoured Amelia getting a gun and shooting him to end the threat once and for all. Gabe can't fake immigration records so the fact that she never left the country despite all the fake emails, photos and posts could bolster her story. Even if she can't prove her innocence, at worse, she goes to prison for a bit.

Please tell me this isn't the end! I need Gabe to pay! To suffer!

I don't think this is the end, well, at least there wasn't a "THE END" by the end of the chapter, and there are a few plot lines the author needs to address, such as Gabe's latex fetish. As for this one, as far as Amelia is conditioned, Gabe is, too. He can't keep apart from her, she is his drug. It would be a good redemption arc if he went to the detective and confessed what he did, faced punishment, and then went back to Amelia, but this is a cat-and-mouse game, and I enjoy it the way it is, too. Great chapter, 5 stars

I forgot to add that every change of scenario was well done. The tension when they were outside a controlled scenario was as strong as when they were in Gabe's place. The only thing that doesn't feel right is the end, because this doesn't feel like the last chapter. If this is really the last chapter, it is still the best story I've read here, but there's some loose ends that can be explored in another chapter or a new story. Amelia now won't be enslaved by the pen, but by her choice...

Not the ending I wanted either, but I get why the author went this route. I've read the last chapter twice now, and its subtle. I think the author wants to emphasize Amelia's resilience. She's a kidnapping victim who survived. She comes out of it broken psychologically, even though she was so strong when Gabe held her. The police cant do anything for her. Through the chapter she's trying to find her place in her old life again. The scene with Gabe in his office is like Amelia finally seeing Gabe doesn't have a mental hold on her. It's her fight to be resilient and come out a survivor. I don't know. That's how I interpreted it. Maybe I'm biased because I'm a survivor too. I'm glad the author didn't go the cheap route and have Amelia kill Gabe. I do wish that Gabe and Amelia ended up HEA. Maybe some alternate endings?

I really loved this ending. It's deep. There was so much symbolism in the writing. Like, I love how the author captures the realism of what being kidnapped is like, and the aftermath of the trauma. I'm taking a first year psych course now and Amelia's development seems consistent with what a kidnapping victim would do. There are so many short term and long term effects from being held captive. From guilt and shame and people feeling broken. People act erratically. Some people get better but it takes time and in the end we see Amelia start to be okay with sharing her trauma with her new boyfriend. To the disappointed first poster, it's not about logic. Victims acts irrationally sometimes. I'm with the other poster. Maybe the author can give us more chapters.

That's not an ending, that's a cliffhanger! I hope you'll continue with this story. Your style is fantastic. I'll buy it as an e-book if needed but please do keep writing more.

How can anyone score this story with less than a 5? How can such a work of art be free of charge on Literotica? Maybe it is the end, maybe not. It is and has been a glorious ride.

Great chapter. Nice story development. I was surprised by the ending and hope you continue the journey.

I vote the author makes several different endings. One where she and Gabe live happily ever after. One where Amelia kills Gabe in self-defense. One where Gabe confessed, does his time, and then goes back to aamelia.

Author, I've been checking this site daily for updates. DAILY! I must have a resolution. Please tell me this isn't the end.

Bravo! 9nce again a chapter way above five stars.

Amelia's struggle to cope once she was freed was excellent. She had endured both physical and mental abuse for months. Her remarks about not seeing the sun for months and being lead to believe she was in another country were brainwashing. There is no doubt that to survive her time with Gabe and maintain some of herself she surrendered to her hidden desires. It kept her dream of escaping a possibilities. People abducted often resort to playing along in order to escape and survive. The way he went about teaching her was wrong but she was isolated from the outside world. No relationship, whether BDSM or vanilla, is healthy if one partner is kept locked and hidden from the world. It is not healthy and shows no regards to the partner's well being. Gabe may think he loves Amelia but in truth she is a possession to him. A toy he can do whatever with. Just like a little boy with a favorite toy, he takes it out to play with, but when it fails to do as he wants he throws or tries to break it. Amelia was Gabe's favorite toy but he loved to occasionally treat her rough either because she did something wrong or for just his sadistic pleasure. The $50,000.00 he left her back home couldl barely be considered an apology for kidnapping her. No matter how many readers wanted them to ride off HEA it could not be possible without Gabe going public and admitting what he did. A trial would allow Amelia to read a victim's statement to the judge. She could have given him a copy to read in prison. She had finally stood up for herself and so jealous Gabe had to resort back to kidnapping in order to own her. He could not stand the fact that there was another man in her life that had shown her a healthy relationship.

LavenderAsp I would love to see you follow up with a sequel on Amelia, Gabe and David. David and the detective could work on freeing her and then the trial and fall out for Gabe. There are enough ways to spin it so that a sequel would be just as compelling. Exploring Gabe's background, developing David to show why he was beginning to want a more permanent relationship. Maybe give the detective a name and background. Amelia getting the counseling she desperately needs. I see the sequel in my mind.

Great writing again! 5⭐️ It shows that life is never black or white... always in the grays! She's given him an ultimatum. What will he do with it? He needs to think on what kind of Dom he really is and what a submissive really needs. Being able to truly give control must be a free decision. Can't wait to see if Gabe can make amends! Is he strong enough for that? Please keep writing. Can't wait after that cliffhanger! 👍👍👍

Hello all,

Thank you for the comments, regardless of whether you liked the ending or not. When I penned this, I didn’t anticipate that the ending would be so polarizing. I knew that many of you had ideas of how you wanted the story to end. I had my conception of the story’s arc.

I will admit that I do have very poorly written alternate endings already roughed out. None of them are wordsmithed or edited yet, and they are vastly different than how I ended this piece. This ending was the conclusion I had always envisioned since about chapter three. It’s in keeping with the genre and provides some ambiguity for the reader to rely on the richness of their own imagination to imagine Gabe and Amelia’s next steps.

As I mentioned to a poster(s) in a private correspondence, this story started as an exercise to determine whether I had the wherewithal to write erotica. I had read a story that was popular. I wanted to challenge myself to produce something that I would want to read myself.

Upon suggestion from some of the posters, I have been toying with the idea of transforming this into an e-book and fleshing out the first few chapters, and perhaps adding an additional one or two chapters. Or, starting an entirely new sequel. Logistically, I wouldn’t even know where to start with that, whether you self-publish or pitch to an agent, or publish to another medium, or offer chapters.

What I do know is that I am humbled and extremely appreciative that you’ve joined me in Amelia and Gabe’s journey. Reading your comments, whether encouraging or not, has helped to fuel me through the writing process. I have always appreciated reader feedback, and I’m glad to see that the story has resonated with some of you. That’s the hope of any aspiring writer, that the work they produce is read.

PS If you have any questions, I’m happy to answer them.

The author set it up so that several endings were all plausible. Amelia could have become a broken, traumatized mess. She could have discovered that her dependence/attraction for Gabe outweighed her resentment for him and reluctantly "chosen" to get back together with him. She could have chosen to firmly reject him, and Gabe respecting her wishes or attempting to forcibly recapture her were both plausible follow-ups. The author wrote the trauma and the internal conflict really well.

Everything was great except for one detail - the fact that Amelia never seemed to consider the possibility of her getting kidnapped again and seemed to have no fail-safes in place, especially when she learned that Gabe lived nearby. It would have been one thing for Gabe's identity to be unknown to her or for him to stay in some unreachable corner of the world, and only contact her remotely before suddenly kidnapping her again. It's another thing entirely for the guy to be right there, identity fully revealed. His location is known, so he can be shot, stabbed, beaten over the head with a baseball bat, any number of things to ensure she doesn't get kidnapped again. His identity is known, so he can be reported, and to more people than just one detective. (Who might be on Gabe's payroll, given how rich Gabe seems to be) For Amelia to have fought so hard for her freedom, and then to have done so little to protect it once she had it seems... incongruous. It feels like the author wanted to have their cake and eat it too - they wanted Amelia to meet Gabe while free, they wanted Amelia to reject Gabe, and they wanted Amelia to not do anything that would prevent Gave from kidnapping her again. You can have 1 or 2 of these things, but not all 3. The pieces just don't fit together.

Brilliant i just couldn't stop reading loved it but i would have preferred a different ending

In every "breaking" story, you need a "final choice" moment. The victim is either given a choice between freedom and servitude, or they're given their freedom and they choose to either stay free or return to servitude. If they "choose" servitude, that's the moment they go from an unwilling victim to a willing participant. And the moment needs to be very clear and unambiguous. This story doesn't have that. The final choice could have been something like Gabe breaking into Amelia's house and giving her a pistol and the choice of whether to kill him or not. If she doesn't kill him, then the next time he kidnaps her, she'll forever remember the "choice" she made, which may make her more susceptible to his manipulations.

I just don’t think the ending makes sense. You can’t give Amelia a choice, allow her to say no, and then kidnap Amelia again. Gabe either needed to change or accept her answer and let her move on with Adam. Liked the writing, but hated the ending. I honestly wanted her to end up with Adam and for him to protect her.

This deserves a book deal. It’s more than just smut to get the blood pumping. You are an amazing writer. And I love that you didn’t glean over the brutal truth about Gabe’s treatment of Amelia as being all out abuse, despite her gradual acceptance and Pavlovian response. She never forgot it. When she confronted him in his office, it was exhilarating. The way you described her three pronged plan of escape at the house was also brilliant, esp how they are based on his behavior and words from even the very beginning of the series. Even if they’re not erotica, I would totally buy one of your books. And the ending gave me the chills but I loved it bc Amelia is not the kind of girl to let her story end this way. I love the fighter that you portrayed her to be but with many moments of nearly giving up.

I wanted to say thank you all for reading and commenting. Whether you enjoyed the story or not, or dissected the entire series or final chapter with painstaking effort, I always appreciate your comments, whether positive and constructive, or not. It's an honour that you even took the time to read some or all of the work. Thanks again.

Final chapter?… no……

It’s so refreshing to read well written work.

More, encore, please !

I don't know how I missed the story when you published it.

I'm happy I found it in the end. I read it basically in two long takes.

It's a shame that I lack the vocabulary in English to express my amazement and gratitude for your generosity to share this novella with us.

You had me so many times... my heart longing for her to just give in and 'be happy with him' while my conscience screamed about the 'wrongness' of it all. It may very well be so, that you succeeded to rebuild the keyconflict of your story within me, the reader. And that's amazing.

I payed good money for far less quality in a story.

5 Stars, obviously.

While... I was very miffed about your cruelty in the last chapter. You gave me a happy ending and then you took it away. That did hurt. Another testament of how much I root for Amelia.

Anon - I'm continuing their story in the next series, Liberated by the Pen. Thanks so much for reading.

EssEssCeh - Thank you so much for reading it. I'm glad that the story resonated with you and that you're cheering for Amelia. We'll have to see what happens to our characters in the next installment.

I skipped ahead from the last chapter I read, (3 I think) I’m glad I did, he’s an absolute fucking psychopath. Initially I was impressed because she kept telling him no, from p.1 of this chapter I skipped to the last page. My next step would be suicide. A monster like him can’t be reasoned with and frankly I’d rather be dead than someone’s puppet. BDSM = Safe, Sane and Consensual or Risk Aware Kink. Regardless it must be a fully informed freely given exchange of power, with checks and balances. There’s an epic range of levels in this area of kink from full time lifestyle right down to fun role playing. There is no such thing as the right way to enjoy BDSM but there are plenty of wrong ways.

I don’t understand why you have this labelled as BDSM? If anything this has more in common with the travesty that is 50 Shades of Grey aka the abusive arsehole stalker a guide on how not to approach BDSM.

From what I’ve read so far of your work you have a gift for writing, it’s very well done. Shame about the psycho though. From my pov it’s the only thing letting it down. I prefer my fantasies to be either believable and achievable (current contemporary) or something that’s completely different and way out there (that covers sci-fi, historical & paranormal etc). This story falls into the former category. There are LOTS of fantasies that will forever remain exactly that. For example a lot of people have the “rape fantasy” it does NOT mean that they want to be raped, the goal in that fantasy is to recreate guilt free sex to experience something that you would never (hopefully) experience. It’s a common fantasy because even now in the 21st century society has fucked over the populace. Men are lauded for having an active sex life those that aren’t get labelled as incel and dysfunctional. Women are reviled and slut-shamed if they openly admit they enjoy sex. Is it any wonder that people turn to fantasy to escape? From my experience this doesn’t work as a fantasy because it’s too believable.

Thanks for sharing and good luck with your writing.

Tess (uk)

This series was painful to read but I did keep going, so obviously I found it compelling. This was an agonizing experience. I have read Comfort Food by Kitty Thomas and it’s of a similar bent. I was crying throughout and not in a good way. I just can’t handle the misery in these breaking stories. I would like to see what you can do in a story with an antagonist that isn’t a sociopath.