by Frenemy54
What a fantastic start you have made to this story. A classic double cross among other things! But unfortunately it is coming up to two years now since Part I. My hopes of Part II ever eventuating are fading all the time. I hope everything is well with You Frenemy and you still have the desire to continue this great story.
Character development (field hockey scene) started well, subsequent action/situation had good pace/description, keep it going.