All Comments on 'Escape Room for Jocks Pt. 05'

dude you are one sick puppy. you need help

Great job with the possession improvement! there are still some faults,but in comparison with previous stories, the improvement is as clear as day. Thank you and please keep on writing!

Somehow, I find that these small guys still in college being able to abduct these many people only slightly less unbelievable that they would be able to build this bunker. Hell, only the four original jocks were already too much.

Their smarmy attitude doesn't help at all. The story would be far, far better without them. No unnecessary breaks in the flow with asinine commentary, and would give an actual air of mystery to the story, with the reader wondering who's doing this to the guys along with them.

In fact, the controllers are so unlikable that the only possible satisfactory end to the story is if they finish it locked in their very same silly area 51, only with nobody knowing they're there and with no way to escape. But as it seems pretty obvious that that won't happen, I don't feel like reading any further.

damn so hot I still want to be jake