All Comments on 'Everyone Loves My Ass Ch. 02'

I know my comment title is the same as from chapter 1. But any who. I must say I enjoyed the teasing and the loving that was happening between the family and I already know chapter 3 is in the works so that should be interesting. I'm looking to see what may happen between the Paul and Dawn, but even more Rick and Dawn because one you left off with an interesting "get Paul hard again" and then theres Rick who obviously has a thing for Dawn and Sam, but Dawn specially should be promising and like I said keep up the good work, keep the series rolling and looking forward to the road trip.

-Acer

This is breathtakingly hot! It's so much tease and anticipation but it's so lovely written, all the figures are so nice and friendly that it's so much fun to see how they act with each other and go their witty plans in talks the full length just like in a tv show or real life. That makes it so real and entertaining. It leaves me hard and happy waiting for the next party hopefully coming soon!

I don't know about anyone else here, but I'm seriously looking forward to "Dad" tapping Dawn's sweet ass and pussy- Lord knows that he desperately wants to. The only issue is Rick- will he know well enough to keep his mouth shut about this family's antics or will he blab to all his friends?

I will definitely keep that in mind, from here on out. I had it sorta vaguely buzzing around in the back of my mind, and now you've brought it to the forefront. It needs to be addressed, especially with what I plan for next chapter.<p>

See, my buddy EldridgeinOO has been lobbying for more face time for the cheerleaders, and I think I'm going to go ahead and grant his turgid little wish in the next chapter.<p>

That's where your point comes in. I was already wondering how I would fit in all the cheerleaders, in terms of maintaining some sort of descretion. Rick needs to be included in that issue, as well.

man this author is a big time tease, in a good way. loved this chapter. i really don't like rick though, he kinda ruins it for me

I'm sure this is perfectly normal behavior in any household in Kansas. HAHAHAHAHAA. :P <p>

Awesome chapter though, applause. God I love Dawn. Can I borrow her? Please? I'll bring her back after the weekend, none the worse for wear... Okay, maybe she'll be slightly ravaged. <p>

Come on! Some buddy you are!

I don't need ALL the cheerleaders. I just need Michele and Trisha, together with Dawn. Three girls is MORE than plenty!

Hey, at least when my cheerladers get wet, they don't rust.

I'd let you borrow Michelle and Trish, and maybe even Dawn, but after seeing what you did to Kelsey in my parody story, you give me pause. I like my ass model cheerleaders in front of the camera, or sitting on my head. I don't need them lying in some emergency room, hooked up to an IV.

I let you borrow MY girls, but do I get any of yours back? Even after I promise they'll only be SLIGHTLY ravaged? Nooooooo! Mr. High and Mighty stevieraygovan wants to keep all his toys! <p>

Fine. I'll SEDUCE Dawn away from you! :P

Dawn isn't into robots. Dildos, sure, but nothing which might attract metal shavings. Although, okay, I suspect she could make an exception, where Carynne and Katie are concerned.<p>

I would, if I were her.<p>

Oh, and hey, by all means, don't let me stop you from borrowing her, for "Conflicted." I checked the fine print and as it turns out she's got a rider in her contract which explicitly allows for cool cameos in demented cheerleader fuckbot epics.<p>

Just have Kelsey's agent call her agent, and they'll do lunch.

"Just have Kelsey's agent call her agent, and they'll do lunch." <p>

How about Kelsey just calls Dawn, and they do each other? Who needs agents?

You & Eldridge are the same, both perverted nutbags! I love it! This is one teasing set of stories, and I for one can't wait for your next installment! Way to go, mate!

Lose Rick. Otherwise, it's a damn near perfect story. I love the innocence and romance. Beautiful work.

can't wait for the next chapter

Boring.

What do you mean, who is Paul? He's Dawn's little brother, which is only stated in the story, oh, a hundred times. I don't even understand what you're asking there. How could you not know who he is?

"You & Eldridge are the same, both perverted nutbags!" <p>

Why am I a perverted nutbag??? *innocent puppy dog eyes* <p>

SRG is the one who has Dawn play with her mom's cunt! Not me! I write about girls who are the personification of virtue and modesty! <p>

As to the "Who the fuck is Paul" troll fuck, fucking kill yourself or go back to your "Simon Learns To Read" book, since you obviously lack the mental capacity to understand an actual story. Dipshit.

What's the problem? Big deal, the guy only got it half right. Even a sabermetrics nerd like you would have to admit that a .500 average is pretty damn strong.<p>

Look, sweetheart, I write about wonderful girls with hearts of gold and potpourri scented pussies, all of whom are as pure as the driven snow. Jimmy Stewart would fit right into one of my little warm and fuzzy Christmas carols.<p>

You? You write about space aliens with over-active libidos. Your characters exhibit all the moral sensibilities of Ted Bundy. The only thing missing from your story is Mr Spock, plus your girls have better disguises. You were at least smart enough to realize that in 2009 nobody wants to fuck green chicks with pointy ears.<p>

"Eeeeheee!" :crotch grab:<p>

:-)

You write about wonderful girls with hearts of gold, potpourri scented pussies, and a 748 gallon tank of fresh, mildew scented tears rigged to their tear ducts. Wouldn't want them to run out in twelve minutes!<p>

Jimmy Stewart? Isn't he the fucker that always cried? <p>

So let me get this straight. Dawnie grinds against her daddy's cock, plays with her mom's twat, but MY girls are the ones with no morals, because they fuck each other? Ah yes. Makes good sense. <p>

And true, nobody wants to read about fucking green girls, that's why they're cheerleaders. And hot. Nobody wants to read about girls crying every three minutes either. Or about fucking blood! <p>

*moonwalks all over your ass* <p>

:P

Eventually, Lit will post our fucking parodies, and then we shall glory in (and cringe at) your Jeffrey Dahmer-ness.

You write Texas Chainsaw Massacre : The Cheerleader Chronicles, and I'M the fucking wackjob. Somehow I don't think people are gonna see it that way. They'll see you for the sick, depraved maniac that you are, and from then on, all you'll be allowed to post are the following two categories : <p>

- Disgustingly sick shit <p>

and <p>

- That Was A Nice Story That You Wrote (your favorite category!) <p>

Just a few more days until your true self is revealed. I'll take good care of Dawn, though, don't worry. She loves me more than you do anyways. You don't even like HER NAME!

...you did give Dawn a shitty name. Yes, you. She should've been Nadia, or Keira, or even Mariska. You know, something cool and sexy, not something you knocked out and threw in the back of your white panel van.<p>

You just had to go and saddle her with one of your favorite redneck victim's names, didn't you? Just can't let go, can you?<p>

Lemme guess, Eldridge Gein, right this very moment you're staring at the real Dawn's head, which is sitting in a jar on your desk, aren't you??<p>

As for blood and gore, I just read your parody, and you actually have eviscerations, body parts landing in AC vents and disembodied torsos being lobbed across the room.<p>

You took a sweet tale of love and wonder and you turned it into your senior prom's after party at the downtown Day's Inn.<p>

Me? All I had in my parody was some gentle ass play, a few love taps, of the sort Kelsey happily writes about every night in her diary.<p>

You? Once again, it's always gotta be the serial killer thing, trying to scream its presence to the world.<p>

You should just re-make a Beatles song and get it over with.<p>

You don't need a shrink, you need the business end of a shotgun in your mouth, like Stacey with the football coach.<p>

You're a menace, I say, a skin bleaching, nose destroying, Shirley Temple worshipping menace who never should've been allowed outta Neverland.<p>

Before all is said and done, you watch, you'll be sewing together Jeff's skin into panty liners for each cheerleader.<p>

:-)

Nadia, Keira or Mariska. YOU wanted to write about an American girl, then you want me to give her a foreign name. How does that even work? Look, man, there's these things called countries in the world, and they all have borders, and most of these countries have different names. See? <p>

How is Dawn a redneck name? If she was a redneck, she'd have been named Sally Mae, or Mary Sue. Or Betty Joe. <p>

Do you even know what Gein means? :P <p>

And boy, I wish I had Dawn's head on my desk. She's so pretty to look at, she'd make a wonderful desk ornament... <p>

And hey, I can't parody what doesn't exist. You're the one that gets off on letting women shred guys during sex, and then the guy smiling at her and saying "It's okay baby doll. I love it when you tear six inch crevasses in my stomach!"

Don't start shifting your sick dementias on me now! <p>

But we'll let the readers decide who is the more disturbed in their parody. (Hint, it starts with stevieray and ends with govan.) <p>

But, it's okay, I understand. You're so overwhelmed from being associated with me that it's overloading your limited mental capacity. I guess I shouldn't blame you. You start seeing me as a musical God and everything. It's okay buddy, I'll get you help. I should have prepared you for this eventuality. <p>

It'll be alright, it will. Trust me. <p>

*double pistol-fingers* <p>

-Billionaire cheerleaders, whoring themselves out to their school's football coach? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

-Football players, attempting to beat the crap out of cheerleaders...after first wanting to rape them? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

-Ex-GF's, smashing in perfectly innocent ex-BF's face with her steel toed boot...after SHE had cheated on HIM? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

-Psycho Cop dad wigging out at innocent son, 'cause dad has his own twisted demons rattling around in his closet? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

-Can't even light a goddamn bar-b-que without going Mongo at the campfire scene fron "Blazing Saddles" on your own head? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

-Slicing off body parts to use as kickballs? Check. Eldridge do that.<p>

Your dog is speaking to you right now, telling you to go shoot some more young women, isn't he?<p>

Face it, Son Of Eldridge, nobody does Psycho like you do Psycho. You'd be downright scary, if it weren't for you being so effiminately gay and impotent, what with your love of Michael Jackson, Tears For Fears, Disney cartoons and Matthew Perry from "Friends."<p>

No wonder you hate women so much. You disgust me.<p>

:kick save, and a beauty:

Hey, you're spoiling shit from my story, asshamper! <p>

"Your dog is speaking to you right now, telling you to go shoot some more young women, isn't he?" <p>

No, actually he's just telling me to go shoot YOU! Where do you live again? <p>

*pets Dawn*. There there sweetie, it'll be okay. I'll take care of the freaky man for you. He won't hurt you and confuse you for other people ever again.

This is superb! Your writing is excellent, the dialog is natural and rings true, the pace of the story is perfect, and the scenes are described in perfect, vivid detail. This has to be one of the best stories on this site! Keep up the excellent work!

I just discovered this story and have only gotten up to this point. Looking forward to read parts three and four and hope there's more to come!

Just magic !!!! Simple as that !!!!! MAGIC !!!!

First, you have no idea how many of those pencil test and diamond conversations I had in college.

Second, I'm not sure if I'd be scared, amused, or highly turned-on to have a conference call with you two sick puppies. Worse, I'm afraid of what it means that I'd even consider it.

Third, again, you are writing characters who are respectful and care about what those they care for think of them. I love that this family is so open in how they relate to each other, and are free enough to allow each other to be who they are. The subject matter certainly isn't for everyone, yet you really value your characters, and I appreciate that. - Anna

Gotta rate this a five more for the arguments in the comment section than the story, all though that was good too.

This story is GREAT!!!! It keeps getting better and BETTER!!!

Probably the best story of its type that I have ever read, (up to this point). Only discovered your stuff yesterday!

Good thing I don't have to talk to you in person, 'cause my tongue is HARD, along with another part of my anatomy!

I am a fan of this type of slow, thorough progression, (as opposed to the 'wham, bam, thank you ma'am' type of story.

The only possible fault I would mention is that perhaps using a proof reader. A few parts I needed to work through a couple of times to get it straight. (Maybe my eyes are getting hard along with my tongue and penis.

Keep up the good work. Only sorry that I can't give you more than a 5 Star rating!

G

Dawn is the best ever. I love this story.

This is one of the best stories on Literotica. I absolutely dig the teasing way this story is written. Keep up the excellent writing.

great story i love that.

And so fucking hot! Nice!

I mean the story telling is amazing, but the story and the ethics are retarded... if this happened to me i would not agree.

Idk having rik dere throws me off he doesnt need to get any

great seems kinda lame to describe this series. looking forward to more. you must relate the drive to cali.

truly didn't believe ch o2 could match 01. looking fwd to 03 with great relish!!!

And I fucking LOVE it. One of the hottest stories I've ever read!!! They were an incestuous family not having sex. I gather from just before puberty till legal age the family was modest. Now that everyone is legal they are 'letting it all hang out' pun intended. I can't wait to read more. THANK YOU.

I love how mom is complicit and egging the daughter on. One of the hottest stories I've read in recent times.

Thank you.