All Comments on 'Expect One Thing, Get Another'

Will this lead to a repeat? Will she tell Mark? Will he catch them? Will Rakesh rat her out? So many possibilities, but as a stand-alone, this story was as enjoyable as any of your others, Jenny. Getting inside her mind was the best part. It's the mental foreplay that sets this above others of its kind.

~B

This is a great story! It is sexy, even hot, filled with interesting vocabulary, and gets inside the head of Jasmine, apparently also known as Kristen. Personally, I've always though Filipino girls were hot, especially the way they tend to dress. This story of course begs for a sequel. Great writing, too! 5* ~~ JB

Overall This is a good story. If I may add a slight bit of criticism there were a couple of times where language took me out of the moment.

1. It’s ba donka bonk. Never in the history of black has it been ba donka dink. Ever.

2. "Oh baby, that's the shizzle“? Sounds like a bad Snoop line, and no one uses that. Even for a 29 year old that would be an extremely dated line.

3. Vajayjay? Gangsta dick? Black salami? Nothing about Quinton even eludes to him being as ghetto as you’re attempting to make him, and even then the phrases vajajay and black salami probably wouldn’t escape his lips.

Other than that, the story’s great. I look forward to seeing more from this.

Sorry, I meant ba donka DONK

Penny, fantastic story. I love the way you Capture the racial differences through language and attitude. Many of us professional black men definitely enjoy getting aggressive and ghetto in the bedroom with our language and swagger. Keep it up.

Lovely story I enjoyed it a great deal. Thank you for sharing. And your comments at the front are spot on.

I read the disclaimer in the beginning, but still wasn’t expecting the language. It was as if the author has never met a black person before and was less “titillating” than comical. This story’s in the interracial category of a public forum online so wasn’t expecting James Baldwin. But it seems as if the author wrote and tried to justify why it sounds like that in their head instead of why it would sound like that in a story