All Comments on 'Exploring the West Pt. 01'

You had me from minute the Dick met Jane. You skillfully pulled me all the way into Jane's cervix. Her scent still lingers, I may not wash my fingers tonight.

I really liked your story. It has a simplicity, detail, quirkiness, and sweatiness that makes it seem like real life, not something that was just made up. Jane too has an inner presence that makes her seem like a real person, not just an imagined porn character. The writing Is very good---an excellent first story. You've set a pretty epic theme: exploring the west! I expect it to be quite an adventure.

(I'm not sure the story is in the right category, though. "First time" is meant for stories about characters losing their virginity. I'm pretty sure both Dick and Jane have been around the block a time or two. So maybe "Erotic Coupling" would have been a better fit. Not sure it matters that much though. You'll be able to put subsequent chapters into a different category if you want.)